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by foehn207/13/07

Rhythm, wow.

Do you use rhythm consciously or unconsciously? That aspect of this poem is most interesting. Four trochees in the first line, three iambs in the second, and then dimeter, for four lines, and suddenly, out of the blue, pentameter. I found the mix a little unsettling at first, but kind of fell in love with it after several readings. After "memories" there should probably be a comma, or the word "of." I trust that that simply passed you by. (Poems can be edited, here.) I hope to know you, more.

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by sack08/10/07

very cool

Yes, the rhythm is a bit unorthodox...I think the first two thirds of the poem work better than the last third. However, this is so witty it doesn't really matter. Thanks for sharing your considerable talent!

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