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Enjoyed it for the most part
First, should whole be hole in the second stanza?
Second, I thought it was an interesting concept for a poem, but I think you've got too many words and they cloud the image you are trying to convey. I did enjoy it, though.
Innocent typo...
"Whole" was obviously an innocent mistake. But take note, people! America has a new, great poet. Nice! I can live the poem, see it, taste it, feel it. And the words are nice. It is coherent, lovely in the way it sounds, out-loud, well constructed, concise, makes me feel, and I could go on and on. T. S. Eliot, eat your heart out! (Oh well, I guess he can't, now.)
Awesome.
Filled with fiery words that stir the emotions and create fast moving images. Very well done, I'll be looking for more of your works.
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