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TathagataTathagataover 16 years ago
I love

this verse:

"the repetition of reality

moments once realized, now a shadow

which exist only with moonlight

three glasses of wine and want"

I know exactly how that feels.

The last verse is the strongest as far as emotional content, and ties it up nicely.

A few different word choices would strengthen it up immensely.

Don't abandon this one.

Thanks for the read

GuiltyPleasureGuiltyPleasureover 16 years ago
Bravo!

Tender and wistful with some well chosen phrases all bound together smoothly. I like.

Tess

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Mentioned in New Poem reviews

Thanks for the share, tt2u!

RhymeFairyRhymeFairyover 16 years ago
Yummmmm !!!

Beautiful ...

WickedEveWickedEveover 16 years ago
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Hey! I like a lot of this, but it feels like it needs a little more work, maybe a few changes. At first I didn't like candelabras in this poem. It seemed like a fat ass on a skinny woman, but you may like that sort of thing. I guess it works okay, though. Anyway, thanks for the read. :)

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