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All Comments on 'Barbarian'

by Rangerbrook

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AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Needs editing!

Unfortunately, the constant mixing of past and present tense is very irritating to read. But with some editors' attention, this could be a really good story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Excellent story-poorly told

The story keeps alternating between past and present tense. Making it difficult to read properly.

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