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Can't wait for the next installment
Being a Marine years ago, the brief description caught my eye and I had to read it. After reading the first two chapters, I can hardly wait for the next installent of this story. The story if very good. Keep up the good work.
A Big Mistake
IT WAS A bIG MISTAKE TO TANGLE WITH THIS GUY i HOPE HE GETS THE SCUMBAG AND HE GETS THE SISTER BACK FROM WINSLOW.
Excellent story!
Waiting for more. Thanks. Albert.
All of the above comments
After reading the favourable comments, I have to say "all of the above" and may I have the next chapter soon please?
Well drawn characters, a rich background and an action driven plot, what could be better.
Thanks for the great read - I'm off to the author index to see what else you've written.
Max
Keep up the good work
I have to admit that I like the way your stories seem to unfold and the development of the social interactions. I believe that this series will be better than "the last 24hours"
Outstanding!!!
So far so, so good! Certainly worthy of all the favourable comments received so far. Superb characterisation with an all action plot giving us what promises to be an outstanding tale rivalling "The Last 24 Hours". Chapter 03 ASAP please! Pete.
YES!!!
GO FOR IT!! wow! what a read exclaimation marks everywhere
Must be a good story then and it is
I can't wait for the next instalment
many thanks for a good gripping yarn
Oh Boy, Oh Boy, Oh boy.
I waited for the next chapter and i missed seeing it for a whole day! Building up very well, action and assholes to come. Make sure the bastards squirm a bit. And please, not so long between drinks/chapters. We're not camels you know. John B.
Great!
This is a great story i love it! Cant wait for the next chapter!! Thanks
Great story
It's moving along very well.. Very interesting.. Their 'mission sounds fairly easy so why do I feel it won't be?? Rachel's sister will have been moved neccesitating they find out where very quickly?? Next installment to tell??
Hell yes
Hell yes. Wicked.
This would make an awesome movie.
Chapter III when?
Way to go, gets us hooked and then not submit the 3rd chapter.
When is it going to be up and readable?
Note from the Author
Chapter 3 has been submitted and is awaiting approval. There is nothing more I can do to speed this process. Chapter 4 is on schedule to be submitted. Chapter 5 may be delayed. My mother has had a heart attack and has an angioplasty scheduled for today. Also I became an uncle at 2:27 A.M today! IT'S A BOY!! Things got complicated again. Sorry.
absolutely brilliant
so far, can't wait to read the sequels
wow
Got my adernaline pumping man .
Thanks
Hey we've been to some of the same SHITTY! PLACES!
As well as NOT being there!!
You're not Bullshit you talk to talk!!
Thanks for bringing my NAVY SEAL brothers into this story.
SOCOM/JSOC NavSpecWarGru 2
U.S. NAVY SEAL TEAM 3 Bravo Platoon
Coronado, California
(Monster)
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