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i mentioned this poem in the New Poem Review thread in the Poetry Forum, Tess. the 50% temperature rating i've given you is so that it does not affect future temp ratings. - wildsweetone.
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Only you...this looked at first a little too stock. The greys and the blacks...This is very good, as per usual for you. I think either the repeated last two lines are either a mistake, but could be slightly changed and they might add a little more to the offbeat note, I don't know, something to think about.
I almost named one of my kids Molly
I love this part: grey and black they hover,/faces raw from a brutal wind/that spins the squeaking vane/and scatters last year's leaves/among the graves. I actually like the entire poem. It's good to read a story. I grow weary of all the poems that have nothing much to say. They tell me this and they tell me that and it's about as interesting as a grocery list written on a piece of toilet paper.
Inescapable ....
"" blue into grey into the black cloak
but they shake of inescapable fate "" ~~~~ I just cannot get this image out of my mind. A very dark place to be and yet the whole poem tells us to celebrate life. Love it my friend. You always have a way of showing not telling, that paints outside the box. Kudo's my friend ~~
How can I tell you
How beautiful this is? Having just lost my Mother and still being raw to the touch I could see all those people gathered as we were .. raising a glass ..
Awesome poem...
describing Molly's demise. Vivid images of death and pending death are created with highly descriptive scenes in the graveyard... Scenes from the Irish potato famine, or rampant incurable disease came to mind. Very well done, thanks.
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