Beauty and the Beast

Advice

Get an ed...

good start

i like the start of your story but it could have done with being longer. hope you submit the next chapter soon.

I really tried

I really tried to read this story, but I couldn't. It's not only that you need help with English, but you need help understanding the mechanics, the technicalities of writing per se--for ex, how to differentiate between what is a thought and what is dialogue - how to write it in a way that the reader can SEE which is which.

Keep trying

I think an editor might be able to help you with some of it. Try to figure out which point of view and at what time you're writing. That will help a lot. Keep writing, it does get easier.

good plot

I don't really have the problem that everyone else has with this story. I read to enjoy the content and I thought this was an excellent start to a story. I really hope that you continue it.

Not bad for a first timer...

I really liked this beginning and for not being a native english speaker, this is a great first try. I cannot wait for the next installment :-)

Good first try

A good effort for your first. It will come easier as you continue. Dont take any notice of those who have made bad comments. They probably havent ever attempted to write or submit a story to this site. They are probably jealous that someone who doesnt have English as a first language can do better than they can. Keep up the good work.

continue

i hope you continue story
p.s muck charpters i little longer not bad for first try

Nice find

I was looking around for beauty and the beast tales n I found yours and I really liked it. Y did u stop writting vuz I would like to read more n more n more. AWESOME story so far!!!!! :-)

please keep going