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Illicit Night Love

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by Anonymous

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by virgofemme01/30/11

Nice work

I really enjoyed this. 5 stars

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by Anonymous04/20/12

Her husband was snoring stertorously. (!!!)

Yes, asleep, she could her(sic) gentle snores.

Perhaps the reader could "hear" the narrative voice more clearly with fewer ten-dollar words from the college thesaurus falling all over the place. Just proofread and tidy up the small mistakes and it will serve the story far better than a sprinkling of fancy phrases.

This one was too quick to get marks out of 5. Two stars only.

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by Anonymous11/10/13

Just a fuck slut whore

Cheating bitch

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