Great start 5142sb I could just imagine myself in that restaurant! Let us have more from you. You have a real talent for erotic detail. Well done.
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Anonymous08/07/07
I rated it as a '2"
No offense, but it wasn't a very good story. No plot, no attempt at defining the characters, no fear of being caught even though someone is the next stall. Wham, bam, no thank you, ma'am.
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Anonymous06/15/10
Nope. 1-star.
You can form complete sentences, but there's no build up at all to this. That's no fun. This is like something a guy would do with a hooker; belongs on a pornsite, not a site called "literotica". People here can, and want, to read erotica. They didn't get here hunting for the same crappy porn that's everywhere else.
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Great start 5142sb I could just imagine myself in that restaurant! Let us have more from you. You have a real talent for erotic detail. Well done.
I rated it as a '2"
No offense, but it wasn't a very good story. No plot, no attempt at defining the characters, no fear of being caught even though someone is the next stall. Wham, bam, no thank you, ma'am.
Nope. 1-star.
You can form complete sentences, but there's no build up at all to this. That's no fun. This is like something a guy would do with a hooker; belongs on a pornsite, not a site called "literotica". People here can, and want, to read erotica. They didn't get here hunting for the same crappy porn that's everywhere else.
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