I really like your stories but you need to pay attention to what you write. For example: "Carrie let his balls pop free from his mouth and she returned her attention to Ellie." How did he get his own balls in his mouth?
Walterio, what can I say? I threw you a challenge in Ch.04 with my "boring sex" remark and you certainly came back with a chapter in which the sex is anything but boring! Given the limitations of the female body (three holes and two hands) Carrie showed us just what can be done within the limitations. I shudder to think what will happen when she learns how to use her feet LOL!! Bravo, a most entertaining chapter. Pete.
It's comments like those that I receive from Peatbog that keep me writing these stories. His comments are always positive even when they are constructively critical. I appreciate the other reader comments as well and I like to hear about areas that I can improve in. Please keep your comments coming and I will continue to try and improve on the story content and minimize the typos. Chapter 7 will be submitted soon.
I have no idea how you keep adding so many interesting and exciting chapters to your stories. As a writer I know how difficult it is to keep a story interesting and fresh. Keep it going my friend!
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Pay attention
I really like your stories but you need to pay attention to what you write. For example: "Carrie let his balls pop free from his mouth and she returned her attention to Ellie." How did he get his own balls in his mouth?
Anything but boring!!
Walterio, what can I say? I threw you a challenge in Ch.04 with my "boring sex" remark and you certainly came back with a chapter in which the sex is anything but boring! Given the limitations of the female body (three holes and two hands) Carrie showed us just what can be done within the limitations. I shudder to think what will happen when she learns how to use her feet LOL!! Bravo, a most entertaining chapter. Pete.
Comments that keep me writing!
It's comments like those that I receive from Peatbog that keep me writing these stories. His comments are always positive even when they are constructively critical. I appreciate the other reader comments as well and I like to hear about areas that I can improve in. Please keep your comments coming and I will continue to try and improve on the story content and minimize the typos. Chapter 7 will be submitted soon.
Amazing!
I have no idea how you keep adding so many interesting and exciting chapters to your stories. As a writer I know how difficult it is to keep a story interesting and fresh. Keep it going my friend!
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