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LeBrozLeBrozover 16 years ago
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Well done little piece that works well in imparting the imagery of how he made himself a fine large family. A couple points that stuck out {to me}: I think you mean for daddies to read daddy's {possessive instead of plural} and on the next to last line, put a comma after sons. I know, picky, picky but that comma should help much in the flow.

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