Normally I love brother/sister incest stories, but this was just awfully written. The dialogue was awkward - no one speaks that way. With a bit of editing, this could be a good story, but right now it's too hard to get through
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Anonymous08/15/07
ok...cud be better
The story line was good ....infact there was so much that you cud do with that ....I can understand that it may be a true story ...but adding a lil bit of fiction into you story is always a good thing...it can keep a commentary like story interesting....which is what i think is missing out ...also adding as to how she wud irritate u ...adding a few instances ...make the story longer....and like someone said ....EDITING is a really important part of the process...
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Anonymous08/17/07
They allways do
Sisters allways do,I really loved my sister,and she loved me,no not just sex.she was 2 years younger than me,and died at 29,I will never get over it.She was all the things my wife could never be,and I was all the things her dreadful husband was not.We wanted to live together as any loving couple would,but it was not to be.
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Anonymous05/19/08
unrealistic
to unrealistic for me no guy that was treated as badly as he was would go to the prom with a pain in the ass sister just would never happen keep it believable
English
too cliche
Normally I love brother/sister incest stories, but this was just awfully written. The dialogue was awkward - no one speaks that way. With a bit of editing, this could be a good story, but right now it's too hard to get through
ok...cud be better
The story line was good ....infact there was so much that you cud do with that ....I can understand that it may be a true story ...but adding a lil bit of fiction into you story is always a good thing...it can keep a commentary like story interesting....which is what i think is missing out ...also adding as to how she wud irritate u ...adding a few instances ...make the story longer....and like someone said ....EDITING is a really important part of the process...
They allways do
Sisters allways do,I really loved my sister,and she loved me,no not just sex.she was 2 years younger than me,and died at 29,I will never get over it.She was all the things my wife could never be,and I was all the things her dreadful husband was not.We wanted to live together as any loving couple would,but it was not to be.
unrealistic
to unrealistic for me no guy that was treated as badly as he was would go to the prom with a pain in the ass sister just would never happen keep it believable
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