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An Interesting, Disturbing Story
Not what I expected but I liked it. Kind of creepy, but compelling.
Thoughtful and interesting....
Not your typical submission on this site but worthwhile reading. One never really has insight on another person's problems or motivations. I was very moved by this work.
Keep at the craft of writing.
Excellent writing, once again, but
I agree with the comment that it had a disturbing ending. The rest of the story was first rate; intriguing, provocative, insightful and pleasant reading.
Lameness
Boring and weird, Then to bring up Hillary. Nothing is more disgusting than that.
Sorry, but I am sure this could have been done better.
Love and Hate
For me, there is a difference between erotica and pornography. The latter wants to get you off. the former invites you to see a new picture, to think in a new way. This story is dark. Sometimes sex is dark, fantasy daydreams turn to nightmares. Sometimes those experiences are the most erotic...and they stay with you. Thanks for both the positive and the real negatives. I get it.
Name changes..or twins?
Anne Transom -Alice Transom; Marcie -Marie. A little more care would go a long way. Btw, what happened to "the dog"?
praise
great story and characters; good job
YOU'RE TOUGH
WOW, YOU'RE A TOUGH WRITER - NO HAPPY ENDINGS AND EVEN THE DOG SUFFERS - ARE YOU SURE THERE'S NO HAPPINESS IN THIS UNIVERSE OF YOURS, OR OURS ? EVERYONE LOST IN THIS SAD TALE - IT DIDN'T HAVE TO BE SO HEARTLESS, BUT IF WE HAD HEART, IT WOULDN'T BE SO COLD....
What can I say ?
except for Anne becoming Alice.
The poor woman ! and what a burden to put on the young man who had given back her life for her. His rejection made it not worth living. I do hope he never realised that truth.
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