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Dialogue
There are sites on the web that give some pretty good instruction on writing dialogue. I'm pretty sure most would agree with me when I suggest you visit one or two.
Very Good Story
I liked it.AND I'm wondering if their children were conceived at home OR perhaps on one of her out of town trips. That would make her kinkier and even sexier in my book.
'Discusting' ?!
How have you got the nerve to criticise an author here when you can't spell; the word is spelt D I S G U S T I N G.
I thought the story was realistic, extemely well told, erotic and S T I M U L A T I N G.
Mr Negative, you mention the writer looking elsewhere 'for employment; I suggest you employ yourself and purchase a dictionary and the try writing a story yourself and have it published here.
Are You SERIOUS?
The guy who can't spell, "disgusting", also can't spell, "this", or "sense"! He criticizes the author of the story for poor writing, and yet HE, can't even write a complete, correct, sentence! Then his suggestion that the author look somewhere else, (by the way "somewhere" should be all one word), for employment is ridiculous. Don't you realize that this is an AMATURE story web site? People don't get paid to write these stories, you dumb shit! I thought the story was fairly well written. A few grammatical errors, but not so many as to overshadow the story. The story line was an obvious fantasy and not a true story, (I prefer true stories), but as a fantasy, not a bad story.
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