- All
Comments (7) - Add a
Comment - Send
Feedback Send private anonymous feedback to the author (click here to post a public comment instead).
| Literotica Toy Store ADULT TOY & DVD STORE FAST & DISCREET |
Literotica XXX Webcams 24/7 LIVE CAMS - FREE PREVIEW W/AUDIO! |
Literotica Adult Movies STREAMING ADULT MOVIES PAY PER MINUTE |
English
Not Enough Here To Make Me Want To Come Back
Sorry, you haven't set the hook to make me keep an eye out for the next chapter. What's next? Two sentences masquerading as a chapter? Back to the drawing board..........
Yawwwwnnnnnn
Please get on with it
So What!
So what! This is the ultimate tease only I lost all interest.
I agree
Not enough of a lead in to make me want to read what follows.
Just enough
..... to make me curious how the dinner will go. Remenber the writer's name is Magica Practica, so the magic will come! Looking forward for the next chapter. However it wouldn't hurt if the next chapter is somewhat more explicit.
Good Story!
There's a nice hook in the story. I'm interested in how it will continue. Please continue the storyline!
NOT ENOUGH
Not enough to qualify as an introduction,
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to The Dinner Party Ch. 01 or
More submissions by MagicaPractica.