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Very hot. I'll be looking for more of your stories.
One suggestion: Watch your use of adjectives. Sometimes only one at a time is more effective.
For example, "heavy breasts" instead of "large, heavy breasts."
"Round, perky, and milky white, her gigantic tits," is a little too much. And perky is an unusual adjective for breasts. Did you mean PERT?
You could use one adjective one time and another later, eg, first "her large breasts," later "her heavy breasts nearly rested on the bed."
Keep up the writing, please.
super hot!
OMFG that was hot and erotic as all hell! please write more stories like these!
Charming to Nasty
I will be checking out more of this young ladies work. She seems to go from charming to nasty in a heart beat, from in charge to a submissive cum slut, even quicker.
ouch!!
why can't i ever meet a girl like her ... or i guess make a girl like her? wonder what the girls think?
Wow
I really liked this, it felt i was really watching them... and made me think of things i want to do ... i hope you write more of these and your harem story.
Well written
Really well written, the pace never lets up. Lots of action, good descriptive writing. Let's have lots more!
good read
loved the tension and apprehension as she learned how to open her ass for him.
ha
prety funny
Enjoyable
Good reading fun while staying on the wall between SM and vanilla. Or rather jumping over the wall again and again from vanilla to SM to vanilla to SM.
Reading it resulted of course in a glorious throbbing hardon, so mission accomplished!
Thx for sharing!
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