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Good Stuff
Like the concise language and imagery. Works well. Mentioned in today's new poem reviews.
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Wonderful poem, especially the second half.
man, I love your work
and knowing you, I always look for the "code". The hidden meaning. Thank you for exercising my brain :)
I would assume saving the eyes for last is symbolic. Of course it is, they had to have seen it coming.
hugs
m#
good grief (or bad?)
strong images! not only the words touch my soul today, but i am also intrigued by those two lines. sunset, flat-line, death, resting - brilliant connotations weaving and leading to the end.
it's so desperately sad. there is hope in the stars, and then they too go out and all that will be left, are blind bones.
your poetry calls to the poet in me. thank you for sharing your skill, and thank you for making me think twelveoone.
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Spare,stark & spot on.
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This is fucking great. No one writes 'em like you.
Not sure
about the two " soft" words in the first verse unless, of course, I'm missing something.
"softly laugh / softer still" sounds too " Hallmark" for you.
Second part paints some great images, wide open for interpretation.
For some reason I see a battle field.
Nice work
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What a macabre vision — love gone and moving on?
Ripped from at least 4 cunt-western songs
And when the stars come out at night
I dream of holding' you tight/ Kenny Chesney
Fate deals a hand that we all must play. And when the stars go out. The skies have turned to gray. I'm gonna walk on out/The Damned
if you say so
never bothered to listen to either, and after wasting my time with the Longfellow thing, I just don't feel like bothering here
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