I liked it a lot! Good tension building, believable story - great! I especially liked him asking her "permission" to touch himself. Maybe give Marie a bit more hesitation in the beginning next time, before she is swept away by her own feelings.
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Anonymous06/14/09
Great
Great story! im pretty sure she made $280 including the $100 he gave her, but I might have counted wrong..
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Anonymous02/22/12
The Price???
An interesting plot/story line, and both were willing participants, BUT, he used her need for tuition money to persuade her.
The story gets a five IF he pays her; a 1 if he does not. I'll wait for a correction or continuation to vote. SOON.
English
Total owed...
It would be a great way to end the story by saying how much she was paid ;)
great story
Another great story Magica. Keep up the writing
Good Story
I liked this story although I'm not too fond of her first time being with a married man. The dialogue and the build up and the sex was great though.
more please more
great please continue the story line
Nice story
You are a good writer Magica!
Enjoyed it!
Was a good story--liked the buildup and the erotic details
Wow
That was amazing! One of your hottest stories yet, which is really saying something!
Very good!
I liked it a lot! Good tension building, believable story - great! I especially liked him asking her "permission" to touch himself. Maybe give Marie a bit more hesitation in the beginning next time, before she is swept away by her own feelings.
Great
Great story! im pretty sure she made $280 including the $100 he gave her, but I might have counted wrong..
The Price???
An interesting plot/story line, and both were willing participants, BUT, he used her need for tuition money to persuade her.
The story gets a five IF he pays her; a 1 if he does not. I'll wait for a correction or continuation to vote. SOON.
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