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beautifully written chapter
this was a beautifully written chapter . . . I dont say it very often about a story . . but this story would still be great if you took out the sexual scenes . . the sexual parts just make the story that much better . . because they are very well done also . .
yes more please :-)
It was worth it.
It was worth browsing through all the chaff to get to your stories. Please keep writing, hope you stay busy on this site for at least one more year. Most of the good writers have gone for lack of feedback. But don't you stop please.
I also think a more romantic or, in another direction, a more sexually sweetly detailed end would have served the story slightly more fittingly. Easily a perfect 5.
bravo!
I like your style of writing and the scenes between the two are very hot. I look forward to the next chapter.
How Wonderful
Your characterizations are excellent. The mystery of Gigi and her needs is endearing. Good writing is really hard work, and I really appreciate the effort in your story. Thank You!
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