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champagne1982champagne1982over 16 years ago
I like

"a baby cadence, a countdown without numbers." This is really evocative of a soldier marching up to the gates, ready to do battle with living. Sometimes there's a bit too much telling in this poem, "Reverence and love in my touch" - I would have liked to see this illustrated with a metaphor explaining how awesome she is and how miraculous the event.

Thanks for sharing.

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