Even though the story was somewhat predictable it had a nice flow to it.
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Anonymous08/30/07
Delightful
Previous comment was 'predictable' and maybe it was a little, but that didn't matter. A lot of life is predictable but this little story was delightful and fulfilling, displaying the right level of emotion for the characters. Not too much emphasis on the sex but just the right amount of emotion to describe their fulfilment.
Other chapters would help, or maybe the author wants this to be a standalone story.
Either way it was excellent. I would like more as I like the characters.
Well done.
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Anonymous08/30/07
of course
of course there are questions. such as will there be a sequel to the bedding? why didn't he return to his parents' home. why is a woman, apparently so lovely, not involved with other males--suitable or otherwise
why, for that matter, did an adolescent have so few possessions?
Fine story, well written. It does well as a stand-alone story, too, with nice build-up and a satisfying conclusion. Thanks for a nice piece of erotica!
Well, as I "stalk" your writings, I'm sort of not understanding how more people could not have left you comments. Your writing is superb. I love your use of adjectives, and less commonly used words. Even your story setup seemed very original, for a story of "best friends mom" you redid it in an excellent manner.
I have to say though, my favorite line was the last one. Nice humor and wit added to a great story. Sometimes, funny IS sexy; I wish more people got that.
Very believable and erotic. Only one problem I found: An 18-year-old virgin guy DOES NOT start by licking her crotch! That might come later, but let him learn a little more basic stuff first.
My sexy mom had my friend Parag on a rainy night and took his Virginity and that's on bareback.
He enjoyed thourly and she must have felt pleasure of being invaded in a best way.
It became a regular event even during my presence.
And my mom started giving me pleasure of creampies.
English
Enjoyed it
Even though the story was somewhat predictable it had a nice flow to it.
Delightful
Previous comment was 'predictable' and maybe it was a little, but that didn't matter. A lot of life is predictable but this little story was delightful and fulfilling, displaying the right level of emotion for the characters. Not too much emphasis on the sex but just the right amount of emotion to describe their fulfilment.
Other chapters would help, or maybe the author wants this to be a standalone story.
Either way it was excellent. I would like more as I like the characters.
Well done.
of course
of course there are questions. such as will there be a sequel to the bedding? why didn't he return to his parents' home. why is a woman, apparently so lovely, not involved with other males--suitable or otherwise
why, for that matter, did an adolescent have so few possessions?
Sweet
A pleasant little vignette, well written and quite erotic.
Well done.
Quite Nice and Moving - A Should Read People
Authoress - Another Red Flower in your portfolio and for very good reason.
Thanks - You are appreciated
With Very High Regard
Simply Loved It !!!!!!
Great Job ! Great flow! Simply loved it!
Well done
Fine story, well written. It does well as a stand-alone story, too, with nice build-up and a satisfying conclusion. Thanks for a nice piece of erotica!
Excellent well written and passionite and erotic!!
Great work! I loved it!
Excellent well written and passionite and erotic!!
Great work! I loved it!
Wow!
Well, as I "stalk" your writings, I'm sort of not understanding how more people could not have left you comments. Your writing is superb. I love your use of adjectives, and less commonly used words. Even your story setup seemed very original, for a story of "best friends mom" you redid it in an excellent manner.
I have to say though, my favorite line was the last one. Nice humor and wit added to a great story. Sometimes, funny IS sexy; I wish more people got that.
great reading
Very believable and erotic. Only one problem I found: An 18-year-old virgin guy DOES NOT start by licking her crotch! That might come later, but let him learn a little more basic stuff first.
She must have felt like Louisa
My sexy mom had my friend Parag on a rainy night and took his Virginity and that's on bareback.
He enjoyed thourly and she must have felt pleasure of being invaded in a best way.
It became a regular event even during my presence.
And my mom started giving me pleasure of creampies.
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