All Comments on 'A Tale of Immorality Ch. 03'

therefore, here's my precious "100"! excellent, author, just exquisite: writing and style, incomparable; story telling, exceptional; theme wise, second to none; originality --- the very definition of originalitty itself! <p>

just flawless! "100" big ones! I gave it a "5" as well, dear brilliant author. you are, simply put, brilliant; indeed, the very definition of brilliance itself. <p>

[those who are deep and sofisticated, they know this reader is insanely JEALOUS of the author, it goes without saying; you could see it oozing out of his failed attempt at exaggeration!]

Here we go again. Was it Ronald Reagan who said that? This "wife" must have problems with self-esteem. She is upset that big dick perfume guy ignores her for a while -- she wants to feel so attractive that no male can resist her -- she makes new rules to justify everything she is doing, even though she knows these things are immoral. The odds keep rising (and other readers have so-stated) that she will get an STD sooner or later, and I'm betting it's sooner. What I can't fathom is how clueless George is, how easy it is to fool him and manipulate him. But I've seen this pattern with other AngiqueSophie stories where the females are always crafty and of course much smarter than the males. Does she plan to get pregnant by one of her lovers and have George raise the child? Does she really think she is so smart and so careful the truth will never come out? George must surely wonder why she avoided sex for two days after her trip (Oh that's right, she was very tired). All he need do is take a few of her panties from the laundry and have the underwear stains' DNA analyzed; it won't match hers nor his . . . and it will be male DNA . . . George is smarter than he sounds and smarter than he looks, and he knows that Anne in the shower does not clear out all foreign DNA from Anne's vagina! Now maybe she douches but even that ploy won't always "wash." I will be interested to see where this story actually goes. A little more character development would be nice. There's more to a story than just sex, isn't there?

very nice. and i think its in the right category. well written.

you write well, too bad your story lines/plots are so poor.

Though I found the first couple of phrases amusing, I couldn't get over the choppy writing. One thing is to create a "rhythm" by using a phrase here or there to stress some facts or emotions, but when it becomes a pattern, it's just plain BAD writing. The lack of punctuation as well as the wrong usage of verbs would make any editor snicker, but since the writing has become so redundant it's just not worth it.

You need a critique partner as well as an editor.

Lots of success!

Yes, the wife is hard to take. The thought process of a sociopath is not pretty. I am ready for more of a story than additional adventures in depravity, but if that is all there is....

Angiquesophie, for another thought provoking story.....

A fan always....

My best wishes

i know you have been drowning me with feedback,

but alas, i don't seem able to reach into my hotmail,

these days...don't know what's wrong.

maybe Someone tries to tell me something?

sorry...i can't yet answer your letters.

I have enjoyed your previous submissions and, while this one is well written, there is a good measure of plot development which just isn't here. I usually "feel" your stories, but not this one.

That said, I do hope that the husband gets a good measure of revenge.

for the low scores accumulating for the writer on a one track theme of male humiliation and disrespect.<P>

The bait is disgust and the tease is non-meaningful words. So in time she too will fall into the cuck writers hall of scum with the very few still clamoring for her male humiliation to excite their numb nuts - no bolts or grey matter either.<P>

It is more and more evident writer - someone deeply hurt you to cause this vengeful grind it in cucking of men in general. Perhaps you need to talk to someone before your life has no sunshine.

She is completely immoral and wanton and with little regard for the consequences of her actions. That being said, I love the writing, it is unapologetic. Most of the stories in Lit. are badly written or unfeasible or just plain dumb...not this one. I admire the story, and I admit that I love to hate Anne...or at least her actions. Well done angiquesophie. It's hard to write a detesable character that is both believable and consistent. Can't wait until George finds out and boots her ass to the curb.

I am truly amazed at the number of readers who seemingly can't discern the difference between good writing and less-than-likable or believable story characters. Frankenstein? Certainly an unbelievable character, yet this early 19th century story has had a significant influence across literature and popular culture and spawned a complete genre of horror stories and films. Parting oceans and sticks that turn into snakes? Ridiculous plots but the Old Testament is the most read and quoted text of modern man. And HardDaysKnight's stories? Some rather far-fetched plots, yet he is one of the most read and respected authors on the Literotica site!

The writer's task is to tell a story, and to the extent that he/she can get the reader emotionally involved in that story, their task was successful. Two thoughts on AngiqueSophie's writing: first, note the large number of responses she gets for each of her submissions -- readers are impacted and emotionally affected, and they can't wait to respond to the one person who got them so riled up! And second, a careful review of the readers' comments shows that almost every one of the readers who comment on her writing style and ability are highly complimentary; the comments that tend to be negative typically disagree with the values or ethics or lifestyle of her characters.

Grow up folks! If you can write well, great, and I look forward to reading your submissions. If not, try not to be so inflammatory when critiquing others who are writing for our reading pleasure.

And I disagree with the comment that AngiqueSophie needs an editor! Knowing that English is not her first language, I'd say the editing of most of her stories (especially this one) is superb! Qudos to the editor, whomever he or she may be.

And AngigueSophie, if you're reading this and are still having problems with your hotmail account, I suggest you consider a new domain -- perhaps a Yahoo account. Yahoo offers free email and doesn't seem to have the problems that HotMail does.

LD

I have to post this fast b/c this author whom you think so highly of DELETES any remarks she cant handle or like. Talk about growing up...

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your analogy to HDK is sad joke and tells me you have no clue. HDK stories are NEVER the same.

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NEVER...

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<b> Kryptonite</b>.... is a pure wank story. <b> Eleanor Rigby </b> and <b>Goofy and My wife </b> are NOT.

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The reason why this author draws such a strong reaction is Two fold. First most folks ARE jealous. She has great ability but the are also frustrated with the fact that

ALL of her stories are exactly The same. She never even tries ANY thing different.

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SECOND in every case the men/ husbands are dumber than dirt and act almost GAY. This author has deep and obvious loathing of straight men. In every story she has ever written the man/ husband is a MORON.

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as you can see you dont get it. You dont have a clue...as to what drives the strong rection to this author repeative stories.

you write so well and imagine even better. i love this series; will have to go back and vote a '5' for each.

thank you.

to be a step too far beyond the realms of reality to be able to take the rest of story - beautifully written though it was - at all seriously.

I'm going to the last chapter. If she is not caught by then I will consider this a failed tale and not read any more of your tales.

keeps guetting me more arused with each chapter.

There's a whiff of something in this story alright. Smells like more of this author's horseshit.

I am not sure what to call the writer ..forget the story…but the closest I would call her is a diseased whore cunt! Whit stds having already rotted the already shit brains if any!!

There's a scent alright...it's from the stanky diseased filled cunt of this MC.

Seriously. You don't fuck this many single men with zero protection and not get an STD.

How sexy is that? Giving your partner a sexually transmitted disease because you are a selfish slut?

Hmmm...kinda gross. I think someone who does this? Probably needs mental health help.