the slut wife wins
To judge moral caracter. As I have none, I love sluts. Big old good ones and good old big ones. But you have talent. Don't waste it. Write us something that don't make me want to load my gun!!!
8 chapters of pure garbage about a whore who stays a whore and a cuck who will always be a cuck.
8 chapters of pure genius about a woman who stays a woman and a man who will always be a man.
and one that could/should have been combined with 7 - making it two simply drew the story out unnecessarily. Ultimately, it was disappointing, despite the good writing and excellent use of vocabulary, because the characters didn't really come to life in any believable sense. In simple terms, the lack of humour and simple humanity in the telling undermined what ought to have been a very good series.
a fitting final insult to the man she betrayed and made a cuckold. A people wonder why men kill their wives.
Let George Do It, is overstated in this case, TK U MLJ LV NV
Sure Ann's a libertine, the crime is that some have an open marriage, and that was why she needed, or marry someone who agreed to be monigimish.
Good characterization, original plot, well written. Excellent!
Sure she says she feels badly, but what does that change? She will live to have her child, to eat, drink and be merry. She will live to fuck around. She will live perhaps to see her grandchildren. What good was George's act of vengeance? Even if he had gotten her and gotten away with it she would no longer feel pain. Better, expose her and divorce her, and truly move on with your life. Succeed in life, while she gets to live with herself as a piece of shit for the rest of her life. If you want to add more pain to her life, keep tabs on her and do what you can to cause anonymous pain. Even though it was an understandable reaction, George blew it.
Her punishment was to live with all that guilt...
unfortunately there are really sick people like her who claim to love their spouse and then cheat repeatedly. The sad thing is she will mourn for a few months then she will just turn back into the slut she is.
I'd wish upon her and her bastard child, AIDS. Ciao!
Harry in VA were as skilled a writer as Angiesophique we would have another talented writer to anticipate.Perfect ending to a beautifully crafted tale. I do agree with an earlier comment that this tale would have flowed better as a complete posting rather than serialised. Writers of this quality are in seriously short supply though.
I read this quite a while back, but never left a comment. I'd just gotten into the whole LW thing and sliced through the best like a hot knife through butter never bothering to comment. Lately I've been blocking so I started going back and rereading the best from the past. Yours always fits that category.
Here's my assessment of "A Tale of Immorality".
First forget comments about mechanics and style. I'm not qualified.
Now here goes...
This was a thoughtful and well-written story about a self-absorbed woman.
However the story ending was a cop out. George kills and then George dies? Were there any indications George could be so violent, and then so self-destructive?
I would have preferred a different conclusion. There needed to be some sort of confrontation, and then some kind of falling off or deliverance. Force Anne to face her behavior. Force George to make some kind of decision. Could Anne explain her behavior, and would George be able to accept her or would he take some other action. Considering your level of creativity you could've twisted these two like pretzels and we'd all believe it.
Honestly, you're terrific!
thanks very much for your rereading of my story and your praise.
in hindsight maybe you are right about the ending, and I might agree with you.
but to be true, I hardly ever rewrite or reconsider my stories, as I hardly have the
time to do new things (which I prefer doing.)
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