Nice start of a story. I hope you continue it and we get to see more of Amber and Danny's relationship. One LITTLE nit-pick, you had a 3rd-to-1st person shift early in the story (and that's a pet peeve of mine) other other then that pretty good.
Great work, sweetie!!!! I'm so happy for you. The story is really good! Keep it up and I want to read more!!!
A great first chapter. The text was seperated a bit too much but otherwise a great story.
I just think that's a bit over the heavens, if you get what I saying.
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Good beginning
Nice start of a story. I hope you continue it and we get to see more of Amber and Danny's relationship. One LITTLE nit-pick, you had a 3rd-to-1st person shift early in the story (and that's a pet peeve of mine) other other then that pretty good.
AWESOME!!!!!!
Great work, sweetie!!!! I'm so happy for you. The story is really good! Keep it up and I want to read more!!!
Lovely
A great first chapter. The text was seperated a bit too much but otherwise a great story.
the god thing
I just think that's a bit over the heavens, if you get what I saying.
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