not bad at all now lets get the part 2 and enjoy what happens next.
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Anonymous09/07/07
Excellent
Now why can't I find a take charge white guy like that? Damn all she said was "Am I dirty" and he knew exactly what she wanted to hear. Where can I find a guy like that?
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Anonymous09/07/07
Good start
Good start in setting up the story. The attention to detail was appreciated, but could I make a little request? Could you limit the amount of "Mmmmmm" and whatnot? Just saying "She whimpered as she ...." works just as well. It was distracting to see it over and over.
Thanks, look forward to the next chapter.
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Anonymous09/09/07
VERY NICE!!!!!!!!!
THIS STORY WAS REALLY HOTT!!! PLEASE CONTINUE....
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Anonymous02/20/09
I'm giving this...
a 100 despite all the 'mmmmmmmmm's.' It would certainly be better if you edited most of those out, but otherwise I like it.
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Anonymous04/22/10
Very good
I agree there are too many "mmmmmmmmmm's", but excellent otherwise.
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Anonymous08/17/10
Mmmmmmm
Mmmmmm,not bad....if you like oral sex
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Anonymous12/20/11
mmm mmm mmm
reminds of Crash test dummies the song ....mmm mmm mmm
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Anonymous06/12/15
too male
let a woman edit out the guys crude rapey dialogue. As soon as he says the word whore the story falls flat.
English
New Twist in Interracial
not bad at all now lets get the part 2 and enjoy what happens next.
Excellent
Now why can't I find a take charge white guy like that? Damn all she said was "Am I dirty" and he knew exactly what she wanted to hear. Where can I find a guy like that?
Good start
Good start in setting up the story. The attention to detail was appreciated, but could I make a little request? Could you limit the amount of "Mmmmmm" and whatnot? Just saying "She whimpered as she ...." works just as well. It was distracting to see it over and over.
Thanks, look forward to the next chapter.
VERY NICE!!!!!!!!!
THIS STORY WAS REALLY HOTT!!! PLEASE CONTINUE....
I'm giving this...
a 100 despite all the 'mmmmmmmmm's.' It would certainly be better if you edited most of those out, but otherwise I like it.
Very good
I agree there are too many "mmmmmmmmmm's", but excellent otherwise.
Mmmmmmm
Mmmmmm,not bad....if you like oral sex
mmm mmm mmm
reminds of Crash test dummies the song ....mmm mmm mmm
too male
let a woman edit out the guys crude rapey dialogue. As soon as he says the word whore the story falls flat.
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