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Fun Stuff
As always, I like how you take the trouble to set up the relationships and give the characters some individuality. It CAN be done, even in a short story. And, of course, sexy black women with average white guys are always nice. :-)
Writing from BF view showed imagination
Really enjoyed this story. A white guy writing from a black woman's point of view was imaginative - nice job. The dialogue was realistic, as was the scenario. I just wish the sex scene between two black women and a white guy was much longer, with more positions. It was a little disappointing after such a good build-up. Check out some of Mystery_Meat's BF/WM stories.
Great!
A good short read!
Hot scenario
I gave it 100 even though it deserved a 90. This was well written and believable to have been written by an AA woman. When we finally got to the BF/WM/BF sex scenario, it was over much too quickly. I would have enjoyed a lot more sucking and even a little fucking.
I know this is
just a story, but for somebody that thought a lot about someone, I think George is an ass hole. He should have given her the tickets with no strings attached, thinking long term.
Oozes with eroticism.
This story was majorly hot. Love the characters, the scenario. Great job!
loved it
can you continue please.
MORE?
I know this was 6 years ago, but please, write a sequel.
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