Okay, I admit it, I don't like the word wank. Not particularly fond of dick, either--um, the word dick. But it really doesn't matter, because the rest of the poem is so fucking excellent.
Love its imagery and tone. Funny and touching, in a bittersweet kind of way. Mentioned in today's new poem reviews.
How touching in its mature sober observations, melancholic but not depressed all in that minor tone and those wonderful images. More please.
This is so very good. The ending was not at all what I expected and like Vamp said the imagery was great.
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