by MagicaPractica
A little tightening here and there could make it great!
example;
Would it be too blunt
If I asked you to lick my cunt
After dinner tonight?
could be tightend to:
Would it be too blunt
to say, "please lick my cunt"
After dinner tonight?
write on!
I don't understand why anyone would want to try to improve on your contribution. It says it all just as it is
Well written, well read, one of the best erotic poems that I have heard on this site! Also the audio quality is excellent!