by Flaouterakh
Would like to see where you take chapter two. Maybe you could draw out that chapter a bit more.
Beautifully written,crystal clear images.For me a good horny read.So very sensitive and very sensual.
This is a well-executed "erotic couplings" type of story, but I couldn't help feeling that the story idea and characters have much more potential. There was a hint of some trauma in the male character's past that deserved to be explored further. Dialog, which is pretty much absent here, could be effective.
Highly erotic and arousing. Beautifully written and am looking forward to future maybe longer instalments.