I've read a lot of your stories and even commented on some. (Positive, of course, don't leave neg.) Some of your stroke stories have been quite enjoyable and hot, and some of your stories impressed me in other ways. But this story is head and shoulders above the others I've read. I realise this is simply subjective personal preference, but I loved the plot, loved the slow seduction, even though I knew he was going to turn out to be who he was. It was the way that you used words that grabbed me. I laughed at the "mounted" and "ride" as you used them, very clever. When the narrator got to the swimming hole though, you used words to weave a magical spell, both allowing me to see the setting and feel the hypnotically calm way that Lance seduced him. The ambivalent feelings of the younger man rang true. The descriptions were beautiful. The picture you painted of Lance's beautiful body and the way the narrator could hear his own cries from a distance, just lovely. "He was pulling me with him through the opening in the rock into the first, more confining, more private pool—the pool with the cascading waterfall that filled my ears with the sound of rushing water. I was crying out as Lance's hands raced across my body, finding curves and crevices and making me tremble and twitch and feel oh so aroused and concerned and needy and reluctant and violated all at once." Absolutely stellar, you wove your usual themes of dominance, submission, control and compression (tightness? The way men enclose whilst taking? Confining?) together in a subtle and lovely way. I am very impressed.
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Anonymous11/27/09
great story
I like the fact the story was steamy but not too sexually explicit. Jake was torn between society's restrictions and his his own emotions. Contrary to Lance who loved who refused to let society dictate who he could desire. Jake and Lance were hot
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Magical
I've read a lot of your stories and even commented on some. (Positive, of course, don't leave neg.) Some of your stroke stories have been quite enjoyable and hot, and some of your stories impressed me in other ways. But this story is head and shoulders above the others I've read. I realise this is simply subjective personal preference, but I loved the plot, loved the slow seduction, even though I knew he was going to turn out to be who he was. It was the way that you used words that grabbed me. I laughed at the "mounted" and "ride" as you used them, very clever. When the narrator got to the swimming hole though, you used words to weave a magical spell, both allowing me to see the setting and feel the hypnotically calm way that Lance seduced him. The ambivalent feelings of the younger man rang true. The descriptions were beautiful. The picture you painted of Lance's beautiful body and the way the narrator could hear his own cries from a distance, just lovely. "He was pulling me with him through the opening in the rock into the first, more confining, more private pool—the pool with the cascading waterfall that filled my ears with the sound of rushing water. I was crying out as Lance's hands raced across my body, finding curves and crevices and making me tremble and twitch and feel oh so aroused and concerned and needy and reluctant and violated all at once." Absolutely stellar, you wove your usual themes of dominance, submission, control and compression (tightness? The way men enclose whilst taking? Confining?) together in a subtle and lovely way. I am very impressed.
great story
I like the fact the story was steamy but not too sexually explicit. Jake was torn between society's restrictions and his his own emotions. Contrary to Lance who loved who refused to let society dictate who he could desire. Jake and Lance were hot
great seduction story
One of the best seduction stories I've ever read and I keep returning to it. I'd love seeing another story featuring that seducer of young men.
The horse whisperer who is also a gay virgin whisperer, what a wonderful idea. Such a nice seduction to show him the way he needs to go.
Sorry, I usually like your stories, but I just can't wrap my mind around an old guy who would pay another dude to seduce a kid. It seems a bit pervy.
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