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WOW!
The story is wonderfully written. I am a great fan of Manly Wade Wellman's horror stories and this one is of the same quality. I want to read more horror from this author.
Well done
I enjoyed your vampire tale Jenny.
Excellent horror
A fascinating twist on the whole Vampire idea - as if the poor guy was a pledge who happened to sign up for the wrong fraternity. I love the way that the author can draw us into a single character so quickly, and make all of the other characters simply contribute to that character's growth (in this case, of his incisors).
Sorry, Jenny
... not your best work. For the Halloween contest I expected something better.
A Hell of a party!
Well done Jenny. The main character is better off as a vampire, because as a human he was more than a little dense.
Good luck in the contest.
Great Story!!!
Please write a chapter about vampire babies.:)
Good story, but...
I was really disappointed by the sloppy editing this one went through. There were a lot of spelling errors and at one place I think Brent's name was confused with Roger's. It really detracts from the compelling read this would have been if not for the errors.
Lovely
What a lovely story. So innocent, but with blood!
Delightful!
A fun read. Well done, JJ! Good luck in the contest!
Great short story!
I really like how we start at the weary end of a regular day, and slowly become involved into the story, seamlessly arriving with him to ... his very last day.
Good luck in the contest!
Maharat
Oscar Wilde's cape
Ah, the cape. Much like Oscar Wilde, I always wear a cape when I write.
Cute story.
Good luck on the contest.
Without even reading past the first few paragraphs
I knew things weren't going to end well for poor Brent. Although he seems happy enough, so maybe I'm wrong.
It was okay
The story was okay. I expected better, sorry.
More Fine JJ Fiction
That story should appeal to a lot of readers. Best of luck in the contest, Jenny.
Creepy
and scary as a Halloween story should be. I agree with Damp Panties, though, that it could have used more and/or editing.
Nice
I liked the idea of Brent being made a part of the club. It could have been a much better story though with a little more care.
Sorry, just my opinion.
Nevertheless, good luck.
A fun story.
But in need of some editing. Good luck in the contest, Jenny!
Very sordid and creepy
with the inevitable ending - it was so obvious what would happen - not even a good story written in poor taste.
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