Daughter and Friend Invited Dad

proof read

While the story content was ok, your use of syntax, grammar and lack of spell check or at least proof reading was very obvious. I find it very hard to enjoy a story if I have to correct what I am reading while I am reading it. I am sure you want the readers to enjoy your stories. I know I cannot enjoy them, if I have a hard time reading them. Slow down a little and re-read them before submitting them.

Really horrible grammar...and awful. Please reread. Kinda hot story but you ruined it by not using English grammar properly.