1st let me say I'm a big fan and I love your stories. This one started off wonderful, then it felt like you crammed in the ending; all the good sex parts at the end felt rushed. This could have easily been a 2 or 3 part story and I hope you pick it up again sometime.
I know alot of people, guys mostly who get upset anytime someone posts a cuckolding wimp hubby story. I can't imagine why they bother reading something they don't like and worse still take the time to leave a negative comment. Such arrogant assholes.
I thought the story was well written and personally get off on the theme. Plan to read more by this author
I feel if you have a negative comment concerning the authors writing ability, then go for it but be a nice guy and try to make your criticisms constructive, otherwise fuck off shitheads.
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Anonymous10/16/07
Very Hot, hopefully a second chapter is near.
I agree with most on the ending, but it was still very hot. Very few people write about couples that are both into being submissive, especially to another couple.
I love this story, especially the way you developed it gradually with some deft touches.
One way to enhance it would be to detail more of their humiliations at the end. Merely helping each other get fucked doesn't suggest much, and you can't do too much to push someone else's cock into your spouse without most of the actual pushing being done by the owner of the cock. I would add more about him being put to use as a frequent cocksucker, perhaps being a fluffer for his wife and also being dp'd and throat fucked daily. And so on and so on. Lots of lovely possibilities that could be added in great detail.
English
So close
1st let me say I'm a big fan and I love your stories. This one started off wonderful, then it felt like you crammed in the ending; all the good sex parts at the end felt rushed. This could have easily been a 2 or 3 part story and I hope you pick it up again sometime.
Yep wish I knew some people that was this stupid
and weak willed.
YES
would love to join you all
good start...
Loved the start of this story, and would like to see more...
You did seem to cram the ending in, so if you do more, please take your time...
loved it
I know alot of people, guys mostly who get upset anytime someone posts a cuckolding wimp hubby story. I can't imagine why they bother reading something they don't like and worse still take the time to leave a negative comment. Such arrogant assholes.
I thought the story was well written and personally get off on the theme. Plan to read more by this author
I feel if you have a negative comment concerning the authors writing ability, then go for it but be a nice guy and try to make your criticisms constructive, otherwise fuck off shitheads.
Very Hot, hopefully a second chapter is near.
I agree with most on the ending, but it was still very hot. Very few people write about couples that are both into being submissive, especially to another couple.
Keep up the good work!
nice
That's a great story. I'd love to read more stories about enslaved couples.
Good but rushed
I agree with the other comments that the sex acts seemed a tad rushed towards the end, otherwise an excellent story. Hope we get more chapters.
Nice progression
I love the way this story builds up to the moment he happily realizes they are not going to switch back the next weekend. Great story.
Yes master?
What a crock. In fact, this whole story was a crock.
love it sexy as hell
God I dream of some couple would train my wife and I to be their slaves wow this story blew my mind
I CAN READ STUPID PEOPLE'S PUTRID DRIVEL
PLEASE SOMEONE MAKE THEM LEAVE... THIS LIFE.
I RATHER LIKE TO SAY ... " I CAN SEE DEAD PEOPLE WHO WROTE STUPID STORIES"
Harry in VA's Witness
Lovely story, well developed
I love this story, especially the way you developed it gradually with some deft touches.
One way to enhance it would be to detail more of their humiliations at the end. Merely helping each other get fucked doesn't suggest much, and you can't do too much to push someone else's cock into your spouse without most of the actual pushing being done by the owner of the cock. I would add more about him being put to use as a frequent cocksucker, perhaps being a fluffer for his wife and also being dp'd and throat fucked daily. And so on and so on. Lots of lovely possibilities that could be added in great detail.
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