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by champagne198210/05/07

good

one line bothers me. "My mouth opens to receive his" leaves me wondering what exactly he's putting in your mouth. Ambiguity is good sometimes but I think, in this case I am left with the idea that you're eating his mouth. Careful! LOL. Thanks for sharing.

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