I found distracting that this story was written like a script. Having to jump from point of view to point of view by name tags, took away from the enjoyment of the story. I'm sorry. Thank you for the read.
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Anonymous10/09/07
Very nice
Well written and with both style and humor. The title goves a hint of the end, but well done!
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Anonymous10/26/07
Sexy!
Slow and sexy! I enjoyed the ride despite the predictability of the ending. Good read!
English
Very slow and highly erotic
This story needs to be made into an Adult movie.
Distracting
I found distracting that this story was written like a script. Having to jump from point of view to point of view by name tags, took away from the enjoyment of the story. I'm sorry. Thank you for the read.
Very nice
Well written and with both style and humor. The title goves a hint of the end, but well done!
Sexy!
Slow and sexy! I enjoyed the ride despite the predictability of the ending. Good read!
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