For me, this is a HOT story. I can identify with the guy! I fit him up to the point of being a physics major. The sister's leadings are the pure stuff of wet dreams!
Even if it was a little unbelievable, it was still entertaining. By the way, have you ever noticed that the people who are most critical of others' works ALWAYS SEEM TO BE NAMED "ANONYMOUS?" That MUST just be a coincidence!
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Anonymous01/21/11
unrealistic
a bit to unrealistic for me she tells their mom and dad that they are screwing even though they aren't and they aren't mad. cousins or not it doesn't fit and to just leave them alone at christmas because they won the lottery most any other time maybe but not christmas. and why is it the parents never said anything to him about screwing his sister or winning the lottery? good as a first draft sucks as a posted story.
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Anonymous11/17/12
agree with the last comment
i totally agree with the last comment way to stupid. what parents wouldn't call him up or go see him to get his side of the story when she told them they were fucking. what kind of parents go off to hawaii at christmas and leave the kids home? what kind of parents win the lottery and don't immediately call their son and tell him? way to odd and unbelievable as said before good as a first draft not as a postable story, this needs a lot of work. please delete and rewrite using a good editor before reposting.
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Hot!
For me, this is a HOT story. I can identify with the guy! I fit him up to the point of being a physics major. The sister's leadings are the pure stuff of wet dreams!
Entertaining
Even if it was a little unbelievable, it was still entertaining. By the way, have you ever noticed that the people who are most critical of others' works ALWAYS SEEM TO BE NAMED "ANONYMOUS?" That MUST just be a coincidence!
unrealistic
a bit to unrealistic for me she tells their mom and dad that they are screwing even though they aren't and they aren't mad. cousins or not it doesn't fit and to just leave them alone at christmas because they won the lottery most any other time maybe but not christmas. and why is it the parents never said anything to him about screwing his sister or winning the lottery? good as a first draft sucks as a posted story.
THIS AND ALL COMMENTS ARE PROTECTED BY INTERNET COPYRIGHT LAW AND CAN NOT BE CHANGED OR DELETED WITH OUT THE PERMISSION OF THE COMMENTER TO DO SO IS A FEDERAL CRIME AND CARRIES FINES AND JAIL
DBRS
agree with the last comment
i totally agree with the last comment way to stupid. what parents wouldn't call him up or go see him to get his side of the story when she told them they were fucking. what kind of parents go off to hawaii at christmas and leave the kids home? what kind of parents win the lottery and don't immediately call their son and tell him? way to odd and unbelievable as said before good as a first draft not as a postable story, this needs a lot of work. please delete and rewrite using a good editor before reposting.
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