All Comments on 'The Perfect Whore'

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walkingeaglewalkingeagleover 16 years ago
Good job! Great fantasy1

I really enjoyed this! It's an exciting vivid fantasy! Great job!

PrOn_EditorPrOn_Editoralmost 8 years ago
Straightforward Portrayal of a Detached Whore

Think you missed a chance to inject a closing "twist" that would give rise to a believable series -

[a] perhaps have her at home later making dinner when her husband arrives. While kissing hello, he whispers a compliment on her first-time role-playing performance in HIS office... to which she replies - "I sure hope your next email scenario is just as exciting! What a wonderful way to earn some spending money."

[b] maybe have her arrive home where an either clueless or even knowingly cucked husband greets her with, "How was your day?" to which she replies, "Sit down, dear, I believe it's time I tell you exactly how one of my days went."

Yes, I know there's a Part 2. Gave the second chapter 1-star for being a huge disappointment, aside from the erotic bit about attaching jewelry and parading her out into the fundraiser wearing only what she had on and presenting her as his muse... THAT had possibilities.

AnonymousAnonymous3 months ago

I like it. Fits my fantasy world. Very aroused ! Thanks ! 5 stars

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