Hmm...guess the first poster must have very different tastes. Your plotline was just fine, and the note you added at the top that this is indeed a true story made it more credible. Though it could have used a bit more detail on how you actually grew apart from and left Dillon and got closer to Daniel, the basic story worked. Also, your submission seems to be free of the style, spelling, and grammar problems that plague other stories on this site. That in & of itself is a huge plus in my book.
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Anonymous04/01/08
GOOD FOR YOU!
Good story -- but even better news, that you got away from that scumbag Dillon! Here's hoping he ends up rotting in a jail cell for a while for roughing women up!
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Hmm...guess the first poster must have very different tastes. Your plotline was just fine, and the note you added at the top that this is indeed a true story made it more credible. Though it could have used a bit more detail on how you actually grew apart from and left Dillon and got closer to Daniel, the basic story worked. Also, your submission seems to be free of the style, spelling, and grammar problems that plague other stories on this site. That in & of itself is a huge plus in my book.
GOOD FOR YOU!
Good story -- but even better news, that you got away from that scumbag Dillon! Here's hoping he ends up rotting in a jail cell for a while for roughing women up!
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