by X_Christina_X
A good story. But the spelling mistakes littered throughout made it hard to read and therefore I couldn't enjoy it to its full potential. 5 minutes checking the spelling could have made this a much better story to read.
The grammar and punctuation were ghastly; I barely finished the first paragraph and had to stop. Find yourself a nice editor before publishing again. :)
I wonder in the bathroom did the waitress hum "Here cum's the bride" lol
Please, please, either find a proofreader or, at the very least run your stories through grammar check before submission. This could’ve been such a fun story if not for all the run on sentences and misspellings. “Walked up behind me an cup my ass my body toke over I pushed back...” Even if English isn’t your first language at least put some periods and commas in there. My body “took” over. I took a “toke” from the bowl. Please keep up your writing. Your stories are fun but, could be so much more enjoyable if you cleaned them up a bit.
Who would mind if stories like this were taken down? How such a substandard submission is even published is a mystery.
LoL at the grammar police. Enjoy the story or don’t enjoy it. You must be a lousy lover if ur concern is misspelled words and grammar on a free site