The story was a little lacking, there's was no dialog and the pace of the story was much to fast leaving to little room for detail and character development. The storyline was a great concept, definitely keep trying and you'll get better and better with each story you write.
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The story was a little lacking, there's was no dialog and the pace of the story was much to fast leaving to little room for detail and character development. The storyline was a great concept, definitely keep trying and you'll get better and better with each story you write.
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