Light of Dusk Ch. 04

Touching conclusion

I expected Jeff to be the one to whisk Dawn away with him, but I was very surprised--and ecstatic--to see that it was their father that made it happen. It's incredible to see the family coming together in such a meaningful way. This wasn't a happy ending for only the siblings, but also for the father, it seemed. I find it important to realize that such an incestuous relationship affects not only the people directly involved in the relationship but the family members around them. There is no question about what will happen in the Kramers' lives now. Wounds have been mended and they are as close as ever.

It's sad to read that you'll be away from Literotica for a while but I'm positive that whatever you'll grace the site with when you return will be well worth the wait. ^_^

You did good

You didn't wrap it up all pretty, with Jeff and Vince coming to terms with each other and their long-standing animosity. You had Dawn's friend Jenny as the 'voice of reason,' although I did wonder if subconsciously, she wasn't a little jealous.
Don't stay away too long. Looking forward to more submissions from you.

Ver nice ending

i think it was a very fitting ending when dawn and jeff ended up together. very well written.

Very Good!!!

What a great way to end the story. Its nice to see a happy ending for not only Jeff and Dawn but for there Father as well. I hope you don't stay away too long, and I look forward to reading more of your stuff when you return cause if its anything like this story then I am sure they will be just as good if not better. Keep up the good work

So good!

I enjoyed "Light of Dawn" enough that I was so looking forward to the sequel and the sequel was so satisfying even if it did leaving me wanting more but in a good way. The kind of a way that made me go "I want to spend more time with these characters".

What I liked best about "Dusk" is that it didn't go straight to the sex. Time was spent with Dawn and Jeff interacting and establishing their rapport and showing me why they were right for each other in spite of the circumstances and when their reunion was consummated, it felt naturally erotic instead of forced and rushed and fake.

I'm glad that you mentioned that there wasn't going to be a lot on the secondary characters so I was prepared, but still, I really liked what was done with Tara who turned out to be the "real" best friend and I liked the way Jenny's actions, while cloaked as the "voice of reason", was shaded enough that one had to wonder what her real motivation was. After all, she was willing to see her best friend married to a man that she didn't love. Whether Dawn and Jeff's relationship was "wrong" or not, Jenny's insistence on Dawn going through with the wedding when Dawn was so clearly conflicted was not particularly supportive at all while Tara's quiet support for both siblings even if she might have thought it was a weird relationship made for a great contrast with Jenny's and it was also a great example of how to portray a character's character to the audience by "action" rather than "telling".

But the real star, to me anyway, was Vince Kramer. LOVED HIM! I almost wish that there had been more of him, but what there was of him was pretty special. And I loved how he put it all together quickly and saw the opportunity it presented rather than the detractions and when he told Dawn that he'd let her go to Jeff only if it was forever, I admit, I swooned. That was indescribably heart melting.

So very good job, big thumbs up, and huge kudos too. Admittedly, this story wouldn't have the punch it did without "light of dawn" to proceed it, but still, between the two and perhaps of all your stories, I'd rank it as my favorite after "Plain Jane". The Kramer family really won me over and wishing that I could spend a little more time with them.

What else can I say

that I haven't said to you already? You nailed it through the uprights from a hundred yards away, Mused. What an incredible journey. Thank you, so much. ~Chargergirl

Congratulations!

The best written and most mature of your work so far. Thanks for the happy ending. The scene where Vince figures out his children's secret and acts to bring them together at last is wonderful. I am looking forward to buying your novel when it is published. If you could let us know what your pen name will be we'll know to look for it.

WOW

Wow What more is there to say. Hope when you return your new stories measure up to this.

Plaudits...

..well deserved for both Light of Dawn/Dusk. I LOVED both stories. Also, I have to admit to my eyes starting to water,(and I'm a man), when Vince figured it out and gave his blessing. What more can I say? Don't be away too long Mused

im still rooting the light of a new day, but thats just me

Wonderful end

Its the end we all hoped for, but for the longest time it looked like it would never be. The scene of the father's realization and turn around was just wonderful. I think this series will; go down as your best ever!!

Hope to see much more from you in the VERY near future.

amazing story

Thank you so much for continuing the story of jeff and dawn. I loved the light of dawn and i loved this also. Thanks. *Vick*

please

please dont go away for too long!

Don't be gone for too long...

That was a marvelous story! I have read hundreds of stories on this site & very few have manipulated my emotions as well as my loins the way your epic about Dawn & Jeff has. I would like to read an epilogue as to see if Jeff could ever lay down the sword with his dad & how the grandkids do. But that is entirely up to you. I have an imagination & I like to think that things will be alright for the Kramers! Great story, hope to see a submission from you sometime fairly soon but take all the time you need to create! Take care Mused...ciao

Jim

Absolutely Love It!

I love this series! Light of Dawn and Light of Dusk are wonderful. I really like how you developed and matured the characters in Light of Dusk. Sad to hear you're taking a vacation from literotica. Please come back soon! There are not enough quality stories on this site already so you leaving will be tough. Thank you for sharing your stories.

And the crowd goes wild!!

Another heartfelt story with an emotional ride and an amazing end. I cant wait to read the stories that follow your return.

Standing Ovation!!

the chant gets louder each time...Kramer...KRamer..KRAmer..
KRAMER!

Don't be gone long.

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i actually had second thoughts if i should read this sequel, but i'm glad i did. keep writing, though i would love to read more um....smut...since i noticed you write the least scex scenes of all literotica writers :) hehehe

i have to say, for reviews and criticism sake, that i just sort of browsed towards the end of your other fic (no not this one, this one is marvelous!), it just got too dramatic for me and i kind of pitied the girl too much.

I keep returning to re-read this again and again

It's one of my favorite of stories on Lit, although I'm not sure I can express why. All I know is that I am drawn back to this story time and again. Really great stuff.

BEST EVER!!!

I am shocked that you are posting stories here. I have read many #1 bestselling novels that were not as captivating as this. I strongly suspect your absence was due to a book tour or fine tuning your screenplay
for some hollywood director to break box office records with the movie he made of your work.ABSOLUTELY PERFECT LOVE STORY!!!! Don't ever stop writing you are an amazing storyteller.

AMAZINGGG

I thought it was great that during this whole thing they always worried the Dad would find them and he ended up being the one who kind of put them together. The whole thing was great and I love all your stories :)

Defying All the Rules

There a so many ways that you managed to do what I would have though impossible: make an incest story a wonderful romance, keep a high level of sexual tension and interest while not have too many sex scenes. Just an amazing job. You've certainly defied my own stereotype that men can't write compelling love stories, this was so romantic. I'm blown away, you are really talented. I'm sure your novel will be very well-received.

Thumbs up!

I didn't like 'Light of Dawn' much, I must admit. But I just _have_ to read a story to the end. Boy, am I glad I did. This story is a gem. Keep it up.

Really Impressive

I am far from a sentimental guy, but I still got a little glassy eyed when Dawn returned to Jeff. Really excellent work.

wow

One word- beautiful.

Freakin Amazingg

This was simply the best story I've read for a while=]

Amazing

Amazing... this one word is everything I think about your story. AMAZING Mused.

wow

wow this whole series was amazing. you are a really gifted writer

so touching...!!

The story is just sooo beautiful...love it love it love it!!

addicted

really good writing.i am addicted to whole series.you are an amazing writer!!!

Not Good!

You could have done better on the whole story all together. It was terrible the story was lacking more detail and was somewhat unreadable. Could have done way better on the ending to it really fit the story the way it should have.

Enough said

I stayed up all night reading this entire series non-stop, beginning to end. I was just hooked from the first paragraph. It was fantastic, and wonderfully written. I was especially shocked at the ending, because I was all set for an unhappy one. But the way you worked it was amazing, and really fitting for those two who had been through so much. And for a guy who normally virtually no emotion, I feel no embarrassment admitting I'm teared up a little as I leave this comment. Beautiful job, and I definitely do look forward to reading your other submissions.

Great Story

Ditto to the last comment. I've been hooked and I've read all chapters all weekend nonstop. What an excellent story. I'm glad to see Jeff and Dawn with a happy ending. What an emotional roller coaster ride. Mused, you're now one of my favorite writers in this site. Awesome story!

OMGGG

WWWOOOOOOOWWWWWWW... AMAZING! i had so much emotion going on throughout reading the entire series. by the end i was crying. though I was freaking out that she would marry that roger dick but the ending was absoulutly perfect. you are an incredible writer aswell. im guessing these arent your first stories? have you ever written any books that have been published? consider it, i think you could go far. and if it helps, i would buy your book.

TK

One Hell Of A Story!!!!!

I couldn't get enough of it, I read the whole thing, both stories non-stop start to ending... I have read many different stories on here and I have to say "You Are One Hell Of A Writer"... If you're not writing professionally, then son, you have missed out on your calling... SERIOUSLY!!!

I look forward to seeing more of your stories in the near future... The only one you have on here now that I haven't read is Blessings and I am going to start on it now...

Thank You Mused...

I read both series in one sitting. Great stories! I can't wait to read more of your stuff. :]

holy crap

both stories were amazing!!!!! i laughed, cried an felt the passion that the characters felt. please keep writing..........

wow!!!

This story was amazing i cried and laughed can you please contine writing because this is one out of a few storys i enjoy. :-)

Wonderful Read

When I popped onto this site I was not expecting such a wonderful tale told by a talented story teller. I read both parts from beginning to end all in one night. Had many mixed emotions (Wanted to beat Jeff up at the beginning, wanted to kill Jenny by the end) but it was all wonderful. I have to agree with some, if you aren't a professional author you should try it out. Enticing and lovable characters like these should not be hidden in the recesses of literotica space. I will be taking time out to read more of your work.

EXCELLENT!!!!

Well now that I've finished the entire series, I'm extremely impressed. You wrote one hell of a story.

Jeff ended up with a devoted, loving wife whose months of training with Jase and his many friends has taught her the pleasure giving skills of a highly experienced cocksucker and cum swallower. Best of all and most miraculously, we have to believe that JEFF'S cock was the only one that was ever fucked into her beautiful (and regularly displayed to everyone in Jase's groups) red hair covered pussy?? A truly wondrous thing... if only it could be believed.

Can you imagine how Jeff would feel every time she sucked him off?... think it might play on his mind just a bit when the memories kick in that his cock is just one of hundreds that she's artfully sucked off, drained dry and licked clean of any residual cum??? With those thoughts in mind, how long would his hard on (and, subsequently, their relationship) last?

It was a truly great story but maybe you can see why I don't see how it's possible that they could ever get around all the shit that happened in your story. The destruction was just too fucking monumental.

Well now that I've finished the entire series, I'm extremely impressed. You wrote one hell of a story.

Jeff ended up with a devoted, loving wife whose months of training with Jase and his many friends has taught her the pleasure giving skills of a highly experienced cocksucker and cum swallower. Best of all and most miraculously, we have to believe that JEFF'S cock was the only one that was ever fucked into her beautiful (and regularly displayed to everyone in Jase's groups) red hair covered pussy?? A truly wondrous thing... if only it could be believed.

Can you imagine how Jeff would feel every time she sucked him off?... think it might play on his mind just a bit when the memories kick in that his cock is just one of hundreds that she's artfully sucked off, drained dry and licked clean of any residual cum??? With those thoughts in mind, how long would his hard on (and, subsequently, their relationship) last?

It was a truly great story but maybe you can see why I don't see how it's possible that they could ever get around all the shit that happened in your story. The destruction was just too fucking monumental.

amazing! just.... fucking amazing!!!

i must say that i thought i had a pretty open mind before i read my first incest story. now the way i see it is that sometimes the universe screws up you now ?. the universe/fate/god/gods or whatever make mistakes such as putting soul mates in the shape of brothers and sisters in this world .

Impecable

This is my second time reading both series, and the second time I am both equally impressed and distraught. I hate that I have no more to read of this passage. I so very much want to see another chapter in Dawn and Jeff's life. I feel deep down there could be so much more! You have the ability to make this such an epic series, and I soon hope to see more. You have all of my support. I've read other submissions in this category, all far less impressive. While they hold my attention, I am not entranced as I am in Light of Dawn & Light of Dusk. Thank you for providing such an amazing piece, and I do look foward to reading your other submissions.

great!!!

im in love with the whole story starting from light of dawn its so ramantic i love how first he was a total asshole and then ended up loving her i loved the most was how she made her life a living hell just to make jeffs life amazing!!!

in love

you are avery talented auther i thimk you became mmy favriot auther thank you for this incredable love story yyou shoul think aout makeing more storys this dramatic and intense i realy lovvvvvvvvve this story

Beautiful!

I've read a few of you stories and think you are an amazing writer. The thing I love about your stories is that they aren't just about sex, they're about love, family, and the importance of bonds. The struggle's some of the charters go through, it makes me want to read forever. Some other stories, they have no plot, or setting. It makes them boring an dull. But your stories come alive, making me feel as if I'm part of them! Truely a beautifil pice of work.

Amazing story

I never thought I would actually cry while reading a story about incest, but damn you are an amazing writer. The way you captured the fact that society would rip them apart if it ever came to light and how it tortured the both of them was heart wrenching. Definitely one of the best romance stories I've ever read.

There is a lot of potential for a sequel too. I can imagine that as Jeff slowly becomes a star that people will start prying into his personal life more. You could easily have a reporter expose it to the whole world and have them deal with the aftermath. You could really confront many sociological issues head on, it would make for an extremely compelling story.

ooh

Ur an amazing writer I cried and came and cried and came I called up my big bro and i told him abou t my crush on him ever science we were kids and he told me he felt that same way but was too afraid to ad mitt it and that was about threemontsh ago and now I'm two months pregnant with his baby!!

great writing.made me think

this is one of the best written stories here.Characters you care about.endings you hope to see.Not very realistic but then who needs reality here.Great work.please write more.

you amaze me

hehe I have read literally thousands of stories from many great writers such as Jessy19 severusmax amasterfound and oldkingclancy and you have just taken a place on my hall of fame for great writers loved this series