She should have asked what the story was before she fucked up big time.How can you come back from that kind of distrust in a relationship.so much for the deep love eh.
Ok thecelt, first thanks for writing and great prose in this one.
Oh boy I guess it goes down hill from here.
What we have here is a Revenge sex story gone wrong. Now I LIKE that theme. Revenge sex is a HORRIBLY stupid idea. And when it goes wrong and the revenger loses it all, I personally feel that it’s a good story…
BUT HERE
I found several plot holes.
Are you telling me that the mother never noticed that her daughter for some reason puts on daddy’s cloths after she takes a shower and runs around in them?
Speaking of that, doesn’t lipstick wear off as the day goes on? OR gets taken off in the shower long with the perfume?
Unless she is putting them on AFTER the shower, to pretty herself up. But then I would actually expect her to KEEP wearing the cloths. I DO know a girl that does that at times.
BUT for the mother to not notice this at all, and you even mentioned it with the “I am surprised you mother hasn’t talked you about this”
I mean come ON!!
How out of it is the wife?
At least she DID try to confirm her suspicions, but to make a revenge tape and then EXPECT him to try and get her back?
Duh!!!!
And as a personal side note, I know WHY you ended the story where you did, but as a reader, I like to see the aftermath. JUST a personal note.
BUT IMO while the daughter will be crushed to learn that mommy cheated on daddy because of her habit with the cloths; the daughter and Husband are FAR better off with out the not in contact with the family wife.
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Anonymous10/25/07
LOL
I find these stories of "failure to communicate" to be hilarious, as the weirdest crap goes on when people assume so much and refuse to do the simple things like honestly talking with their life-partners to avoid misunderstandings.
If ever I was in a situation where I had further questions or suspicions that I couldn't reconcile and I really wanted to find peace of mind, I'd hire a competent, discreet investigator to get the goods... after all, why stoop to a cheater's level? Why jump off the cliff like a brain-dead lemming?
In addition to what DoctorWyldcard wrote I find it hard to believe that a mother would not recognize the shade of her daughter's lipstick or the scent of her perfume.
It was OK but very predictable given the clues you laid out. Angie would have verified her suspicions before acting so rashly. Too bad. At least she is in shape and will have no trouble attracting a new husband.
Like many old stories rereading is fun. I am not saying that it was stolen, what I am saying that it was almost a spoof and the whole plot stretched out before me after the first few lines. The only surprise for me was her clear self evaluation in the mirror.
It was fun and I thank you for puting together this story!
Like many old stories rereading is fun. I am not saying that it was stolen, what I am saying that it was almost a spoof and the whole plot stretched out before me after the first few lines. The only surprise for me was her clear self evaluation in the mirror.
It was fun and I thank you for puting together this story!
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Anonymous10/25/07
Chrysler Delco?
This really isn't a comment on the story. Cliff was working at Chrysler Delco? Delco is a GM brand name.
I have to say I saw this one coming from the beginning. Why is it most cheating stories are about a real lack of communications? The sad truth is people find it easier not to converse then to talk about things that may upset each other. Soon it is just don’t bring up anything controversial it’s not worth the time or heated discussion. Relationship on cruise control, all down hill.Thanks for the entertainment.PT
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Anonymous10/25/07
Watch
Watch the first part of the CD, get up and take the CD for evidence and leave and then go to the lawyer the next day and file for divorce and take the stupid whore to the cleaners. Or better yet, take her to a secluded place, hang her and gut her alive and burn what's left.
Kill 'em all let God sort 'em out....................thesnipe
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Anonymous10/25/07
It's not very realistic
I would say that a wife of 21 years would probably bring the lipstick stained shirts to her husband's attention and ask (or demand) for an explanation. As described in the first part of the story, Angie is a strong and determined woman once she has set herself to a task. She felt her marriage might be threatened, so she decided to work on getting into shape, trying to light the spark again, and so on.
It's simply not very believable that she says nothing to her husband after seeing the stained shirts week after week. She's not a wimp. It also seems out of character for her to videotape her having intercourse as revenge. I just don't know too many women who think along those lines. Either you want to try to save your marriage, or you want to get a divorce and hit him where it hurts, in the wallet.
I appreciate why you chose to end the story when and how you did, but it does seem to cry out for "What Do I Do Now? - Cliff's Story." Whether you decide to continue this story or not, I want to thank you for sharing it with us. I always look forward to any new story from thecelt.
Saw this one coming down the pike a mile away, but good read just the same. Like another said, how often is the lack of communication the problem. Even after 30 years of marriage, we still sometimes have communication problems, thank goodness not like this though.
The daughters perfume and lipstick at the very beginning was a dead give a way.
The sad cliche of these types of stories is all the same. The WIFE always decides to cheat 1st then tell the husband and have the confrontation... when she could Just as easily confront him... and if he is guilty make him suffer by going out a cheating one time
the idea of revenge cheating is the the best idea since the invasion of Iraq... sarcasm... but the point remains..
why dont these wives confront 1st OR get irrefutable evidence THEN cheat.???
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Anonymous10/26/07
woups!
Angie must have had quite a red face at the story's end. Great short story. The story brings something home: a good lifestyle including proper exercising, dieting which are high in veggies, fruits, and grains, and perhaps needed vitamins and minerals can lead to a new life with more happiness and more positive rewards for those over 50 ..... or 55 or...... any age. Keep On Writing Celt. RAG
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Anonymous10/26/07
It was predictable and very easy to read.
There was a definate lack of communication between the husband and the wife but it seems to have been completely on the wifes part. Maybe she should have wondered after seeing the lipstick color that her daughter was having an affair with her father? Anyway like most out of it wives she over reacts and does something more than stupid. She has committed adultry and betrayed herself, her husband, her daughter, and her marriage. She has placed her family in harms way by having sex outside of the marriage opening the family to STDs and AIDS. There is no question of her infidelity she has just handed her husband the evidence. If he doesnt have a heart attack he should pitch her out of the house and file for an immediate divorce. She can go move in with the gym worker if she can push the other sluts out of his bed first. Stupid people do stupid things and trash is trash. Always throw out the trash.
The ending of the story was juvenile and predictable. Revenge sex does not seem to make the heart grow fonder. I think the story really needs a chapter 2 in order to be complete. The real question would be, does hubby forgive Angie or not? And what is his explanation for putting his arm around the girl at work, married though she may be, and harmless though it may be? No sex for a year? I can't imagine that for two healthy people unless one was quite ill. Maybe if they are over 70 or 80 years old but it sounds as if they were late 40's or early 50's, so why no sex for a year? Talk about lack of communication. And why doesn't Cliff wonder more about Angie's sudden interest in sex after a year of no interest? One thing that is realistic about the story is that women usually control the sex in a marriage, you've got that right. . .
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Anonymous10/26/07
Predictable formula plot
Almost like we read it before. A template of sorts or rewrite of one. Needs an end to be unique? Maybe the husband can hire Will at a 6 figure salary to keep doing his wife (like you had in Billy).
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Anonymous10/27/07
A classic story
This is a classic story of communication failure. I enjoyed
the story. I think how or if she gets out of this mess would make a great follow on story.
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Anonymous10/27/07
SEQUEL PLEASE: FORGIVE and RECONCILE
Why should Hubby be hurt or threatened if wifie let Will take a crap in their marriage? Cliff can use his influence with the bosses’ daughter to hire Will at big time job, wifie can host parties for all of their friends and coworkers, and then everyone can have drinks together afterwards and be real good friends. JUST LIKE IN THAT CRAP BILLY. Billy was a revenge cheat too: for hubby’s perceived neglect. AND ALL OF YOU SOOOOO LOVED BILLY (BARF). All those 100's for a plot sooooo believeable (PUKE). Doesn’t all that warmth, forgiveness, and tenderness just fit in here soooooo realistically too (Gag). OOPS, that would tack an over the top formula onto the much used template found here in Chapter 1. Forgetaboutit.
The humor may be that this is satriizing the stories of men who discover what they think is evidence of their wife cheating and then instead of COMMUNICATING - of course there would be not story if they did - go off "half-cocked" and get revenge in all the various ways possible. In this case, we are supposed to giggle and go uh-oh at the end with the wife. But in the real world, what would any normal, loving husband do with this kind of evidence of her selfish disdain for him: no communication necessary: divorce court or murder on the eveing news - uh-oh? Ha-ha?
Not bloody likely.
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Anonymous06/07/08
well then
what happended after that ?
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Anonymous01/25/09
Stupid people do stupid things. She is now a slut
and the divorce will set him free. She gave him the evidence for the divorce. End of story.
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Anonymous05/23/09
over the top
for her reaction and out the door dor her
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Anonymous10/25/09
Epilogue
So many choices for an ending. These types went out ages ago and are no longer popular....write your own? Married all those years, he's patient with her, doesn't fool around, doubtful this guy is going to want to forget or forgive. He is built on total trust and love and after all those years she acted without trust, just acted...sounds like she was obsessed with her new self and told herself she would get away with it because he was cheating. C'mon, write the epilogue...be a real writer!!!
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Anonymous01/03/10
No Epilogue needed
Use your imagination!! The story is perfect the way it is. As far as being a writer is concerned thecelt is one of the best.
some of the readers on here, do they have NO imagination of there own?!
Yes, the story could have been (& still could be) continued, but which way to go?
The author appears to have simply decided to let the reader make their own ending!
Does the hubby get to watch the film or does he get "distracted"?
If he watches the film, does he dump the wife? Does it excite or gisgust him and lead to other activities for either or both partners?
Just what are or could be the consequences?
Maybe it could inspire someone else to write an "ending"
As far as i'm concerned this is a good piece of writing by the Celt!
OH, SHIT......THIS HAS BEEN USED IN MOVIES, BOOKS AND REAL LIFE...VERY APPROPO.....TK U MLJ LV NV P/S STORIES WITH OUT A CLOSURE ENDING LEAVE THE READER TO WONDER.
Fuck that cheating bitch. When you attempt to get revenge on someone without verifying the facts it always comes back to haunt you. If there was a part 2 it would show Cliff throwing his cheating wife out of the house and divorcing her ass and leaving her with nothing. I HATE CHEATING WIVES. No matter what the circumstances are. Oh shit.
DON'T BELIEVE ANYTHING YOU HEAR AND ONLY HALF OF WHAT YOU SEE!!!!!!!
Yep, rules to live by. I worked in a factory for awhile and the rumor mill always ran none stop, full blast. And hardly any of it was ever true. So why didn't she just ask him. Hope she likes being alone
Angie certainly reacted initially with calm and with a good plan, and then committed to implement the plan. Great story, much better than the norm under these circumstances. Then, without asking to sit down with her husband and only circumstantial evidence as to any indiscretion she blew up a marriage which - all things considered - was doing okay. Too bad Angie. Hope you find someone. If it were me and I allowed you to hang around you would find it hard to earn your way.
English
Caught
She should have asked what the story was before she fucked up big time.How can you come back from that kind of distrust in a relationship.so much for the deep love eh.
Dang mac trucks..
Ok thecelt, first thanks for writing and great prose in this one.
Oh boy I guess it goes down hill from here.
What we have here is a Revenge sex story gone wrong. Now I LIKE that theme. Revenge sex is a HORRIBLY stupid idea. And when it goes wrong and the revenger loses it all, I personally feel that it’s a good story…
BUT HERE
I found several plot holes.
Are you telling me that the mother never noticed that her daughter for some reason puts on daddy’s cloths after she takes a shower and runs around in them?
Speaking of that, doesn’t lipstick wear off as the day goes on? OR gets taken off in the shower long with the perfume?
Unless she is putting them on AFTER the shower, to pretty herself up. But then I would actually expect her to KEEP wearing the cloths. I DO know a girl that does that at times.
BUT for the mother to not notice this at all, and you even mentioned it with the “I am surprised you mother hasn’t talked you about this”
I mean come ON!!
How out of it is the wife?
At least she DID try to confirm her suspicions, but to make a revenge tape and then EXPECT him to try and get her back?
Duh!!!!
And as a personal side note, I know WHY you ended the story where you did, but as a reader, I like to see the aftermath. JUST a personal note.
BUT IMO while the daughter will be crushed to learn that mommy cheated on daddy because of her habit with the cloths; the daughter and Husband are FAR better off with out the not in contact with the family wife.
LOL
I find these stories of "failure to communicate" to be hilarious, as the weirdest crap goes on when people assume so much and refuse to do the simple things like honestly talking with their life-partners to avoid misunderstandings.
If ever I was in a situation where I had further questions or suspicions that I couldn't reconcile and I really wanted to find peace of mind, I'd hire a competent, discreet investigator to get the goods... after all, why stoop to a cheater's level? Why jump off the cliff like a brain-dead lemming?
Thanks for the story!
Not Too Believable
In addition to what DoctorWyldcard wrote I find it hard to believe that a mother would not recognize the shade of her daughter's lipstick or the scent of her perfume.
we knew long before Angie
It was OK but very predictable given the clues you laid out. Angie would have verified her suspicions before acting so rashly. Too bad. At least she is in shape and will have no trouble attracting a new husband.
It is a delightful read
Like many old stories rereading is fun. I am not saying that it was stolen, what I am saying that it was almost a spoof and the whole plot stretched out before me after the first few lines. The only surprise for me was her clear self evaluation in the mirror.
It was fun and I thank you for puting together this story!
It is a delightful read
Like many old stories rereading is fun. I am not saying that it was stolen, what I am saying that it was almost a spoof and the whole plot stretched out before me after the first few lines. The only surprise for me was her clear self evaluation in the mirror.
It was fun and I thank you for puting together this story!
Chrysler Delco?
This really isn't a comment on the story. Cliff was working at Chrysler Delco? Delco is a GM brand name.
Good story
I have to say I saw this one coming from the beginning. Why is it most cheating stories are about a real lack of communications? The sad truth is people find it easier not to converse then to talk about things that may upset each other. Soon it is just don’t bring up anything controversial it’s not worth the time or heated discussion. Relationship on cruise control, all down hill.Thanks for the entertainment.PT
Watch
Watch the first part of the CD, get up and take the CD for evidence and leave and then go to the lawyer the next day and file for divorce and take the stupid whore to the cleaners. Or better yet, take her to a secluded place, hang her and gut her alive and burn what's left.
Kill 'em all let God sort 'em out....................thesnipe
It's not very realistic
I would say that a wife of 21 years would probably bring the lipstick stained shirts to her husband's attention and ask (or demand) for an explanation. As described in the first part of the story, Angie is a strong and determined woman once she has set herself to a task. She felt her marriage might be threatened, so she decided to work on getting into shape, trying to light the spark again, and so on.
It's simply not very believable that she says nothing to her husband after seeing the stained shirts week after week. She's not a wimp. It also seems out of character for her to videotape her having intercourse as revenge. I just don't know too many women who think along those lines. Either you want to try to save your marriage, or you want to get a divorce and hit him where it hurts, in the wallet.
Part 2?
I appreciate why you chose to end the story when and how you did, but it does seem to cry out for "What Do I Do Now? - Cliff's Story." Whether you decide to continue this story or not, I want to thank you for sharing it with us. I always look forward to any new story from thecelt.
WHOOOPS
Saw this one coming down the pike a mile away, but good read just the same. Like another said, how often is the lack of communication the problem. Even after 30 years of marriage, we still sometimes have communication problems, thank goodness not like this though.
A banner day to be sure
Stories by thecelt and Salamis, both favorite authors of mine, on the same day. My thanks for an entertaining read. Oops, indeed!
cheap cliche
"story"... or, to qoute the wife, it's basically just "shit"
LAUGHABLY BAD; your worse story in a long time
this is a fucking sad joke right?
VERRRY PREDICTABLE
The daughters perfume and lipstick at the very beginning was a dead give a way.
The sad cliche of these types of stories is all the same. The WIFE always decides to cheat 1st then tell the husband and have the confrontation... when she could Just as easily confront him... and if he is guilty make him suffer by going out a cheating one time
the idea of revenge cheating is the the best idea since the invasion of Iraq... sarcasm... but the point remains..
why dont these wives confront 1st OR get irrefutable evidence THEN cheat.???
woups!
Angie must have had quite a red face at the story's end. Great short story. The story brings something home: a good lifestyle including proper exercising, dieting which are high in veggies, fruits, and grains, and perhaps needed vitamins and minerals can lead to a new life with more happiness and more positive rewards for those over 50 ..... or 55 or...... any age. Keep On Writing Celt. RAG
It was predictable and very easy to read.
There was a definate lack of communication between the husband and the wife but it seems to have been completely on the wifes part. Maybe she should have wondered after seeing the lipstick color that her daughter was having an affair with her father? Anyway like most out of it wives she over reacts and does something more than stupid. She has committed adultry and betrayed herself, her husband, her daughter, and her marriage. She has placed her family in harms way by having sex outside of the marriage opening the family to STDs and AIDS. There is no question of her infidelity she has just handed her husband the evidence. If he doesnt have a heart attack he should pitch her out of the house and file for an immediate divorce. She can go move in with the gym worker if she can push the other sluts out of his bed first. Stupid people do stupid things and trash is trash. Always throw out the trash.
I was disappointed in this one.
The ending of the story was juvenile and predictable. Revenge sex does not seem to make the heart grow fonder. I think the story really needs a chapter 2 in order to be complete. The real question would be, does hubby forgive Angie or not? And what is his explanation for putting his arm around the girl at work, married though she may be, and harmless though it may be? No sex for a year? I can't imagine that for two healthy people unless one was quite ill. Maybe if they are over 70 or 80 years old but it sounds as if they were late 40's or early 50's, so why no sex for a year? Talk about lack of communication. And why doesn't Cliff wonder more about Angie's sudden interest in sex after a year of no interest? One thing that is realistic about the story is that women usually control the sex in a marriage, you've got that right. . .
Predictable formula plot
Almost like we read it before. A template of sorts or rewrite of one. Needs an end to be unique? Maybe the husband can hire Will at a 6 figure salary to keep doing his wife (like you had in Billy).
A classic story
This is a classic story of communication failure. I enjoyed
the story. I think how or if she gets out of this mess would make a great follow on story.
SEQUEL PLEASE: FORGIVE and RECONCILE
Why should Hubby be hurt or threatened if wifie let Will take a crap in their marriage? Cliff can use his influence with the bosses’ daughter to hire Will at big time job, wifie can host parties for all of their friends and coworkers, and then everyone can have drinks together afterwards and be real good friends. JUST LIKE IN THAT CRAP BILLY. Billy was a revenge cheat too: for hubby’s perceived neglect. AND ALL OF YOU SOOOOO LOVED BILLY (BARF). All those 100's for a plot sooooo believeable (PUKE). Doesn’t all that warmth, forgiveness, and tenderness just fit in here soooooo realistically too (Gag). OOPS, that would tack an over the top formula onto the much used template found here in Chapter 1. Forgetaboutit.
I saw it coming but it was still good!
Yep-predictable but still good and well-written.
doesn't she ...
feel really stupid. now its his turn, and what does he do ?
perhaps a reaction that she'll definately not care for.
This is, like, so unfinished!
The humor may be that this is satriizing the stories of men who discover what they think is evidence of their wife cheating and then instead of COMMUNICATING - of course there would be not story if they did - go off "half-cocked" and get revenge in all the various ways possible. In this case, we are supposed to giggle and go uh-oh at the end with the wife. But in the real world, what would any normal, loving husband do with this kind of evidence of her selfish disdain for him: no communication necessary: divorce court or murder on the eveing news - uh-oh? Ha-ha?
Not bloody likely.
well then
what happended after that ?
Stupid people do stupid things. She is now a slut
and the divorce will set him free. She gave him the evidence for the divorce. End of story.
over the top
for her reaction and out the door dor her
Epilogue
So many choices for an ending. These types went out ages ago and are no longer popular....write your own? Married all those years, he's patient with her, doesn't fool around, doubtful this guy is going to want to forget or forgive. He is built on total trust and love and after all those years she acted without trust, just acted...sounds like she was obsessed with her new self and told herself she would get away with it because he was cheating. C'mon, write the epilogue...be a real writer!!!
No Epilogue needed
Use your imagination!! The story is perfect the way it is. As far as being a writer is concerned thecelt is one of the best.
ok!
ok! !et the bitch begin!
"What we have here is...
a failure to communicate." Nicely done. Predictable, but none the less fun.
Her last line is perfect.
Thanks.
LMAO
"Oh Shit" Imagening what comes next is perfect. Thank you for this. Jim
Well I guess Shit really does sum it up!!!!
Good story, but you should have finished it with the husband throwing the cheating slut out on her ass........
UNFINISHED,,,,,ONE STAR
i can't believe ...
some of the readers on here, do they have NO imagination of there own?!
Yes, the story could have been (& still could be) continued, but which way to go?
The author appears to have simply decided to let the reader make their own ending!
Does the hubby get to watch the film or does he get "distracted"?
If he watches the film, does he dump the wife? Does it excite or gisgust him and lead to other activities for either or both partners?
Just what are or could be the consequences?
Maybe it could inspire someone else to write an "ending"
As far as i'm concerned this is a good piece of writing by the Celt!
Good ending
I thought the ending was very appropriate. We can use our imaginations for what happened next if we want to.
THE FAMOUS LINE
OH, SHIT......THIS HAS BEEN USED IN MOVIES, BOOKS AND REAL LIFE...VERY APPROPO.....TK U MLJ LV NV P/S STORIES WITH OUT A CLOSURE ENDING LEAVE THE READER TO WONDER.
nice story
"SHIT" is what she'll be standing in once he sees that DVD
5 stars
Interesting.
LOOKS CAN BE DECEIVING
just like covers on books. TK U MLJ LV NV
Oh Shit is right lol -
Trust but verify - verify means have proof not good suspicion or reason rofl.
I hope he has one hell of a sense of humor -
Good
Fuck that cheating bitch. When you attempt to get revenge on someone without verifying the facts it always comes back to haunt you. If there was a part 2 it would show Cliff throwing his cheating wife out of the house and divorcing her ass and leaving her with nothing. I HATE CHEATING WIVES. No matter what the circumstances are. Oh shit.
HA HA
DON'T BELIEVE ANYTHING YOU HEAR AND ONLY HALF OF WHAT YOU SEE!!!!!!!
Yep, rules to live by. I worked in a factory for awhile and the rumor mill always ran none stop, full blast. And hardly any of it was ever true. So why didn't she just ask him. Hope she likes being alone
All I can say is LMFAO!!!!!
***
Sheeeeit, that's an easy one. BTB! Cheers!
I DONT THINK THE FAMOUS "O SHIT LINE"
will make up for the DVD he is about to see, and the Tiger is totally wasted, TK U MLJ LV NV
She only cocked the pistol half-way.
And it's still going to go off on her. ROFL
Great tale! 5 HUGE Stars!
Almost Angie, but not quite.....
Angie certainly reacted initially with calm and with a good plan, and then committed to implement the plan. Great story, much better than the norm under these circumstances. Then, without asking to sit down with her husband and only circumstantial evidence as to any indiscretion she blew up a marriage which - all things considered - was doing okay. Too bad Angie. Hope you find someone. If it were me and I allowed you to hang around you would find it hard to earn your way.
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