Where this ended is not a very good place for a "cliff hanger" It needs to be quickly followed up with next chapter and an ending. Dont string this out into a long series of chapters. 3 or 4 at most. Keep sizes realistic and keep them enthusiastic. Girls like this really are more likely to "share" certain aspects of a boyfriend. Heck I dated 2 17 yo on the same night in the same car ant the same time at the same movie and parked with them when I was 17 so these things can happen. Just don't string this out in sections. Get it written and get it submitted all at once!
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Anonymous11/03/07
can't wait for next chapter
what a fantastic story. seems like growing up again except for the e-mail and girlfriend
hope you get chapter 2 wrote soon
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Good Start but Needs A Quick Chap. 2 and Ending
Where this ended is not a very good place for a "cliff hanger" It needs to be quickly followed up with next chapter and an ending. Dont string this out into a long series of chapters. 3 or 4 at most. Keep sizes realistic and keep them enthusiastic. Girls like this really are more likely to "share" certain aspects of a boyfriend. Heck I dated 2 17 yo on the same night in the same car ant the same time at the same movie and parked with them when I was 17 so these things can happen. Just don't string this out in sections. Get it written and get it submitted all at once!
can't wait for next chapter
what a fantastic story. seems like growing up again except for the e-mail and girlfriend
hope you get chapter 2 wrote soon
MOAR
Please, you gotta make some more!!!
5 STARS!
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