Jenna Gets Broken In

BULLSHIT

The she loved being raped concept is for sick minds only

Count me among the sick then, I love stories like this!

This is garbage

I like your other writing, and do enjoy reading some of the non-con...but this story is very poorly written. A disappointment. The situation as you describe it, the circumstances, would never lead the main character to feel arousal or need. Fear, hate and disgust and lots of adrenaline to flee and escape no matter what would shut down all sexual urges in a person. As a reader it just left me feeling nauseous. I hope you'll consider reworking the plot or just dropping this story. Writing a slightly "warmer and fuzzy" fantasy is erotic, hitting too close to the truth of events as they can happen is not. Fine line there....
I do hope that you don't give up on writing altogether, this is a criticism of just one story.

Almost a ghetto story.

Try another theme.

Decent

Not bad

So sorry - disappointed

I loved your other stories, so I checked this one out. I see that you explored a slightly different theme than anything you've done before. It was rather unpleasant reading. I think that's because I have come to expect something different from you. I think others who like the more humiliating forms of non-consent reluctance, and the objectification of a female by men, will probably enjoy this story.

Nice approach to seduction...

Nice, slow, nonviolent seduction...more, please.

To the critics:

To the tight-assed puritans who commented...

Just what part of "Non-Consent/Reluctance" and "Erotica" do you not understand?

Well, I can understand

why several people have responded negatively. I have previously read Twisted's The Hunter series and absolutely loved it. Also read the story with all the vegetables and loved that too. So when I saw a new story posted by this author, I was excited and looking forward to another good read. I do like some of the non-consent/reluctance stories on this site.
In short, I assumed something, and then had my assumption proved wrong. I kept reading, thinking it would become more appealing to me. By the time I realized that I just wasn't going to enjoy the story, no matter what, I'd pretty much read most of the way through.
Well, no harm, no foul. I will probably avoid any future non-consent/reluctance stories by this writer, but might read or at least skim any future sci-fi.

Good story that ended too abruptly

I thought the story was very well written - almost too much so. It was definitely a dark story, but then what does one expect from an author named "Twisted." It was a little hard to take because it was a little too real in the scenario, if not necessarily in Jenna's reaction of arousal.

My only criticism was that the story had no ending. It just suddenly stopped. I kept looking for page 2 but there wasn't one.

Don't let the critics get to you. Not every story on Lit is for everyone.

Great start to a series I hope!!!!!

come on

where's the rest of the story

Please finish this short story!!

Please?

I can understand how this story isn't for everyone. Being a work of fiction, I rather enjoyed it. I would really like to see a conclusion to the story sometime soon.

So HOT.

I love this story and only wish there was more, as a second chapter is much needed. I'd love to be in Jenna's shoes.

Some body needs to finish Jenna.