All Comments on 'C is for Clueless'

i felt it was a pretty good story. there were some holes though:<P>

one hole was the Alex jail time - 8 and 1/2 + for simple assault, resisting arrest, and some threats? i could see 6 mo/1 year, or probation, but 8 years was weak.<P>

another was the grown children's reaction. Alex and Mary are still their parents, it seems strange they would totally cut them off.

A little bit cut and dried on the narrative, not too believable when Helen's kids call Nick 'Dad', but still a nice story about cheating and consequences.

Nice story line.

One quibble: "bare" is not the same as "bear" {not the animal}.

-- KK in Texas

Well told story but the plot is a little too plain.

<p>For simple assult you don't usually do time. At best it was considered a domestic dispute and since it was his first offense he would have gotten probation, a suspended sentence, or at best community service. Not "years" of jail time. Not for something that Nick would have been made sue him in civil court for his medical bills.</p>

<p>But I disagree that kids can't change thier attitude where they don't want to be around a parent fast. Trust me on that one. If I never see my father again I won't be too broken up over it.</p>

<p>The only thing that would have commented on beside the jail time would be the "Dad" comment from Carole at the end. That seems a little out of character for anyone to do "immediately" after finding out their father was cheating on their mother and their mother has a new lover waiting in the wings. That didn't fit in the story very well along with Mary just fading off into the sunset. That point and their kids never trying to find her. Parents and possible "grand parents" don't wander away from their kids and grandkids. Even though the kids might be mad at their mother, they will try to accept her, unless so was so evil to not make it possible. But the way you wrote the dialog suggest that the kids didn't feel that way. So that seemed out of character for Mary.</p>

<p>Most of the other stuff seemed to fit well, so I'll leave it alone.</p>

-Risq

I realize this is a scorpio 44 story but they should NOT have had sex with each other in Vegas while the spouses had NOT yet be officially "caught" and confronted...

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no one knew what they were going to say or do when confronted / caught

A well written story. A little too perfect a fit for all the things to fall into place not in years or months but hours. Well done just a little to unbelievable at the fast pace for me. To fall in love as the offended parties did in a day was too much for even this optimist. <P>Thank you for the entertainment<P>PT

Author - you are appreciated for your effort, time, talent and theme of marital consequence.<P>

There is no other emotion as dramatic as finding out your most loved one enjoys selfishly disrespecting you at every opportunity.<P>

Then to read of the justice meted out as life always does sooner or later helps to give the story credibility and reality. That is a real leveler and much more palatable than the cucks, watching and cheating often found here without a spec of life's realities.<P>

So, thanks again Author - you are looked forward to.<P>

With High Regard

It appears to me that Mary was probably seduced by a predator and the complete separation from her kids was too harsh. I don't understand why Alex just didn't switch and stay with Mary - he would have been better off. He obviously didn't care much for Helen or respect her at all. Interesting tale, but again, a sad story.

Being called dad by the others daughter doesnt mean she considers him dad, only that she understands and accepts the arrangement of her mother with him as lovers. It was mentioned in the story he took all the kids camping, was their coach, and did the home repairs for them, and that their kids were good friends. He isnt new to them and is a known quantity. Reaction to the pictures would be enough for them to severely cut off relations with their now dispised parents. That the cheating wife took her money and disappeared isnt really a far fetched thing. In her lust she had betrayed, disrespected, and abandoned her husband, her marriage, and therefore her children. Her love for the other man was totally rejected by him as she was just a fuck toy with no real value, that would destroy a woman who had already destroyed her life. One could very easily argue if her actions previously did not reveal some mental illness what happened to was so traumatic that she would be now mentally ill. To disappear without a trace is one way of denial of what she had done and what had happened to her, allowing her some sense of stablity and saneness.

to be developed more. as is, she was nothing more than a prop. Alex had a plan, though it didn't work out as he wanted, so the author gave him a more complete character. <p>

Mary was a used by the author more as an incidental feature to this sad tale, so story-wise, Mary got the short end of the stick. And story-wise, too, she was literally screwed unroyally. <p>

Cruel and unusual punishment. Or was that crime and punishement? LOL <p>

Over all, liked the story: it was neither too serious nor too non-serious; the dialogues were decent enough to be believable... though light enough not to be taken too seriously...

I enjoyed this story but agree with some of the other comments. I can't see Alex getting serious jail time for a minor assault, especially if he has no prior criminal record. A woman like Helen would ordinarily be so upset and angry I'm thinking she would not easily or quickly trust another male for intimacy. Even Nick would likely be cautious but here we see two very hurt, presumably devastated people just hopping into the sack with each other! OK, they knew each other for a while, but it is quite a leap from there into bed. I'm a bit surprised about the cream pie scene; that seemed to sneak in without warning, where did that come from? The stories are fun to read; please keep writing.

Story line a little light, but great sex with pretty good revenge. I usually only get a fine + damages for punching someone out, albeit I never did it in front of cops. I would have liked to see the slut wife suffer a bit more, but all in all a happy ending, and we all know - I LOVE A HAPPY ENDING!

first, you say they were in a group of friends, but that they weren't all that close. (Helen says 'but we barely know each other!') suddenly, Nick is the guy who does her handiwork like fixing things that break, and their kids have been close all their lives?

second, a first time offender doesn't get 8 and 1/2 years in prison for punching someone.

Truly a fiction. With feeling of betrayal and deception on the part of the spouses, it is hard to imagine that the "victims", would immediately want to jump into another long term arrangement, where trust, love and care are important. A revenge sexual act is possible. The story would be more believable if both waited for some time before committing to another marriage.

Good effort and the sex scene nicely done though.

This was a good story but I had some issues with a quick permanent relationship and the kids just accepting the new relationship. Thanks for the words.

An enjoyable and well written tale deserving high marks. However, the ending was unbelievable! Alex getting jail time for a minor first offence – No Way, and the disappearance of Mary, I suspect that she went off somewhere and drank herself to death. And those kids – God protect Helen and Nick from such ungrateful, unfeeling brats, Mary and Alex are better off without them LOL! Looking forward to your next. Pete.

<p>I liked the "you're dripping cum on my carpet!" line. That was funny.</p>

<p>The dialog was a bit arch. Not the way normal people would speak, IMHO. And the ending was abrupt and rather harsh, I thought. It's a kind of extremist ideal of how things should go, but Alex(?) wouldn't have spent all that time in jail. And Mary just disappeared, never to be seen again?</p>

<p>Hey I kinda despise my first wife, but for the sake of my kids I don't want her to disappear off the face of the earth, though come to think of it, it is rather a appealing thought.</p>

<p>In the story, I thought the kids acted rather strangely. In real life they wouldn't have said or done the things they did. Even if Mom was screwing the neighbor, they wouldn't have disowned her forever. And they wouldn't have immediately accepted Dad having a new wife so readily.</p>

<p>But it is fiction, and the author has the right to take the story wherever he likes to go. But for me the believability factor would have been higher if the people acted and spoke more realistically.</p>

Just to be a nit picker , it started with him finding out on a fishing trip , it ended that he found out while playing golf!

you lost me on the ending. First, you describe Helen and Nick were just causal friends but suddenly he becomes this substitute daddy and long long life mate for Helen. Second, with convicted murderers getting out a few years it is not credible that Alex would get 8-15 years for punching Nick once. Lastly, Mary's disappearance would drive most kids to find her if for no other reason than closure. Mary was entitled to half so unless she was independently wealthy she would not walk away. While I believe that most spouses like Nick and Mary would eventually move on with their lives the speed of that outsome in your story is not credible.

I liked the story, but I agree with the other comments that a lot of things didnt add up. God job on the originality of the story though!

Kind of confused isn't it. C as in a really Confused story, and the ending is very strange.. Sort of unbelievable if you ask me. Ah well, I'm just rambling here, kind'a like your story I suppose :) cheers Yoron.

stayes and fishes because he don't want his buddies to think that he thinks that his wife is cheating...Face it...they all ready know and by his actions he just proved himself to be a wimp as well as clueless. Why was his wife fucking Alex when she wasn't even fucking him??? whooo whooo you dumb ass SOB. I am really talking to scorpio..it's the one that made these characters up. How can you ever expect to write when you don't have any balls scorpio? I know perhaps you could write faggot stories...I'll never read you again

alex and mary got careless and were seen. that was the beginning of their end. the good ending was done, the lovers and the combined family, and it was ok with me.

and in the end the two cheats got what they deserved and Helen and Nick got each other and the kids - just goes to show - if you cheat on your spouse the shit is bound to hit the fan sooner or later. like the use of modern technology too - I'm in to GPS and use it for walking in mountains etc. Just one serious mistake was made by your lapse of memory and the story. At the beginning Nick is out 'FISHING' with his buddies when he is told about his wife possibly cheating on him then at the end of the story when they are all sat talking with the kids he tells them - 'A week ago I was out playing 'GOLF' with some friends????? A damn good story but need to keep a track of details like this as it could mess it all up.

In my opinion, the 'hero' was just as guilty as his wife!!

Well written story and excellent ending. Thanks for sharing.

it is VERY unlikely that he would get a felony conviction. Most likely a misdemeanor with probation or county jail for less than a year.

Nice tale...

well i guess laws are different where iam assault n resisting arrest are federal crimes and prison sentences have been dealt out .. when i left my ex husband 7 yrs ago he did walk away from me and our 3 children never to been seen or heard from again he even signed off all parental rights to them in court.. as for the dad calling these kids grew up together and if alex wasnt a very affectionate dad it could happen.. i grew up with an extended family and even at 40 i call some aunt uncle and another set mom 2 n dad 2 ...

The lawyer's advice to "just make sure they don't catch you" is not realistic. Suppose these two cheated-on spouses were being followed and they ended up in the legal soup. Do you not think they'd sue their lawyer for his atrocious advice?

Furthermore, no lawyer gives a discount just because he has both clients in the case. NONE!

Now lastly, the children have just been grossed out by their cheating parent's behaviour, with the comment "ew gross" being bandied about, and the two love birds want to add to that "Oh yeah, we've been bonking too"?

In the real world, the children's reactions are going to be just as condemning against these two as they are against the other two philanderers. It's going to take a long time for these children to make the emotional transition, and any sensitive person would have realized that and not mentioned anything to the kids.

This one is so full of logic and relationship and legal holes that it becomes completely unenjoyable.

Fix it!

Another one please

a bit quick on the rebound. I give them 6 years

A fiction is just what it is...a possible scenario of what can happen when someone cheats and gives all their love and sexual attention to someone else. In this story Mary had given her family up in hopes of spending her life with Alex.

Alex didn't want to replace his wife with Mary so he dumped Mary and fought to get back with Helen. He lost everything too and went to prison. There was a time when you could get long terms in prison for minor crimes. Although that isn't too likely anymore in the real world. Yet, it doesn't matter in this story as long as he is gone.

As far as badmouthing this writer as one commenter did, that is just plain despicable! Don't read this author if you do not like his stories.

This author has the view that you can fall in love with anyone if you just decide to and work towards that end by loving that other person. I personally agree. That it may last or not depends on many things, we all know that. In this story he has known this woman for years, going camping with her and her kids often, coaching the kids in Soccer, etc. He was as close or closer to all the kids and Helen than Alex was.

The way I read the story was that he moved on and cemented a family life as soon as he realized that Mary had not loved him for a long time and there was no love or liking for her by him anymore. That everything fell into place so quickly is what denotes this story as a fiction.

We all have known someone that just takes off with a new man or woman. Hell, thats more or less what I did on my first wife. She was a serial cheater as well, but she would not just leave and give me a break. With me leaving instead, I was soon broke and had to start over. That is not fiction...but in fact, reality. The husband seldom gets much in the divorce. Even if the wife cheats proving adultery seldom helps with the community property laws. My taking off and leaving the home was considered abandonment by the court. Keeping my wife in the style of living she was accustomed to was the court's main theme and she got everything while I got to pay for it. I had the job.

This story was conveniently written so that the husband came out on top. Nothing wrong with that. We would all get tired of just reading about the wife getting the gold while the man got the shaft! That's much too real...so just accept the fiction.

Thanks Scorpio

Seniors = 0

you cannot lock your spouse out of her house. YOU CANNOT GET A judge to bar her or him from there home without just cause. none exists. all assets have to be split 50/50.. cheating in most states is not recognized . 15 years in jail for what. they give murders less time.. maybe 3 months since there was no permant injurys..make your stories more real..

This story is fiction. Comparing it to real life is like being upset that the roadrunner in the cartoon doesn't die when the truck runs over him! We accept that the roadrunner gets up after the truck runs him down. Accept that in fiction things that don't happen in your neighborhood may happen.

Fiction writers may choose to invent and populate a world different from the one where you live.

I invented the world of this story. In this world I can lock a spouse out of what used to be their home. I can create a world where two people who have been parenting kids for nineteen years can wake up and see they are better off together. I like the world I created.

Scorpio, thanks for an enjoyable story. Also, thanks for saying what I have written as comments elsewhere: This is fiction. I, personally, have chosen to enjoy what you have written and hope you continue to write.

Well written with a good plot and character development.

I thought it was a really good story and extremely well-written. In fact, it was one of the better ones that I have found on this site.

Thanks for sharing.

I like wild and outlandish plots. That's not the problem here. However I expect people to act like people, and the real world to be, well, real. In the real world you don't get 8+ years in jail for throwing 1 punch where no one was injured. And why would a mother drive off and abandon her kids? These are minor points in the story and only serve to pile it on. For me personally, it detracts from the story.

I have no problem with plots where the hero is an ex-navy seal with a 7th dan black belt in karate. In fact, I like those stories. But when he uses that cell phone to get evidence of her infidelity, and, as a result gets an 85-15% split in their assets, I wince. There are ex-navy seals and there are black belts in karate. In family law there are no 85-15 splits because of adultery, and we all know it. It's the author's responsibility to make us believe. So at least let us know about the prenup they both wanted that required that 85-15 split if there ever was adultery. If Alec is going to jail for 8+ years, have him attack our hero with a broken beer bottle, nicking his carotid artery and him barely making it to the emergency room alive. If Mary is going to lose her kids, have them choose Dad over her, while she desperately tries to maintain a relationship with her kids. We can believe that.

The comment was made and measured against the life, times and circumstances of the commenters life, accurate. However... I wasn't writing about the hometown of anyone who ill or might read the story. I was writing fiction. The most successful film in history was written about a world where tall green people lived in trees! AVATAR wasn't about where any of us live. Neither was this story.

Readers looking for stories about the world where they live should invest in their local newspapers and even then they will get a biased view of the world. I inject some real cities, restaurants, highways and situations that have happened and mix them with fiction.

Some of his suggestions are really good ones. I look forward to reading a story he submits.

Keep writing, please. Fantasy or not. Real life or not. I, personally, enjoy stories that give at least some semblance of lemonade from lemons. Your fans await another gem.

The cheaters were caught. Mary took off like a scared rabbit and Alex was a dick and got sent to jail for it.

And they all lived happily ever after. Well, maybe in an alternative universe anyway.

HA

8-15 for what? simple assualt that will get you 90 days and a fine for a first offense. not a likley ending. did mary kill herself...

It seems some readers don’t understand the meaning of the term fiction.

I think it was a good story that happened in your own little world where anything is possible. Please keep on writing and thanks for sharing.

IDB.

Do not know why I missed this when it came out. I went back and read all the comments they did make me laugh. A work of fiction (fiction is the form of any narrative or informative work that deals, in part or in whole, with information or events that are not factual, but rather, imaginary) I was taught this in primary school.

There used to be an advert for an insurance company with Michael Winner where very over the top things happened with people getting upset at which point he would say "Calm down dear it's only an advert"

Yeah, I read through all 48 comments and only Bigguy commented on the shameful act of throwing away perfectly good pizza! The rest...eh, who cares. She disappears, he goes to jail for a redicously long time....hey, they were stupid! But throwing away perfectly good pizza...now that is just unbelievable!

I was "clueless" also. We were having trouble; she was recovering from alcoholism; I was doing group counselling; she requested we seperate for 90 days at the suggestion of her conselor; she promised we would both gain if I could give her a little time; the kids (5 & 7) cried a lot because they wanted both of their parents; I remained celibate (first time in 20 years); she promised we were almost ready to get back together but needed another 30 days . . . at the end of six months she admitted she had been having sex with several guys and didn't want a divorce because she knew she could not get as much money as I was giving her during the seperation. Lot's of crap had happened over our 12 years together, but I kept hoping it would get better . . . damn I hurt for a year! Now (35 years later) I don't and we are friends because we share two daughters, two grandchildren, and 35 years of recovery. It is not the way I wanted, thank goodness; it is even better. I have four more step children, five step grandchildren, and have been married to the same wonderful woman for 35 years. NO, it is not the way I planned it to be, but it is better than I had ever hoped it could be.

Ya, the story was hard to read; ya I remembered the pain; I also remember the rush of love I felt when I met the lady who was to become my 2nd wife (for 35 years). Times were financially hard, but the love we shared all this time (she just died two weeks ago) made it all worthwhile. The troubles were transient but the love remains. Lynn

An interesting story line.

"Alex could have had the house, kept his job and kept fucking Mary. I wonder if he thinks about that." - Marvellous ending.

It is not explicit, but it is written as though Mary was a housewife. After last child left for college, she started volunteering. How could she get money once from a credit card and never be heard from again? No retirement plan, no Social Security (would not yet qualify, anyway)!

Also agree that one count of assault with mitigating circumstance, no injury, NO previous record, would NOT get Asshole 8 years in prison! Maybe a week in jail and 6 months probation!

Otherwise, a good sad tale!

Shame throwing out that pizza !

Clueless is an oxymoron for this story. Helen was the true victim, Mary was a complete idiot. Alex got his revenge on himself. The real crime in this story is wasting the pizzas. Great writing!

8 and a third for to 15 for a first time assault? Even with the threats his lawyer should have been able to argue emotional distress or something.

is strewn with clues if only one could locate them, TK U MLJ LV NV

Too quick to hop into the next bed by both of the "innocent" spouses. Cost a star. Too quick for all children to switch sides. Surely one of them must have realized that the two "innocent" spouses talking re-marriage when the divorce petition (or complaint in some states) had not even been served on either cheating spouse (and it's not clear if they have even been filed with the court) meant something serious was up with the innocent spouses.

Also, both "innocent spouses" lost one half star in my rating for their adulterous conduct. Until their divorces were final, they were legally married to the cheaters.

Next, Mary's dissappearance off the face of the earth left Nick with some property distribution issues. If the hous was in both names, he's going to need to take steps to get her off the title. Insome states, he'll have to wait seven years to get her judicially decreed dead, and then seek to lear the title. (As with an Affidavit of Survivorship in Minnesota.) There may be pensions and annuities to divide. After 22 years of marriage, cheating, adulterous Mary is entitled to a piece of them. So he's going to have to look for her at some point. 1/2 star.

Finally, 8 to 15 years for what in most states is a misdemeanor offense (meaning six months of confinement at most, and a small fine ($1000 maximum in Minnesota --Minn. Stat. Section 609.224) is way too over the top.

Of course, in Minnesota, the thrat might be considered a terroristic threat, Minn. Stat.

Section 609.713, which is a felony, punishable by five years in confinement. (Most states don't have such an overly broad and draconian law however, and require the threatened personactuallybe put in fear, and again, in many states, this is only a misdemeanor. So in most states, he's not going to much, if any, jail time. One more star.

OldJag

I have read many, many stories on this site and yours is excellent. Your story line reads and feels like reality. Too many stories are written simply to appeal to the "seedy" side of life.

But I generally like to see the cheated spouses wind up together. This story was more realistic than most because the cheated spouses were in the same circle of friends, the two families had camped together, cheated Dad had coached the cheater husband's kids, etc. Unrealistic that cheater wife disappeared and cheater husband got such a long prison term.

Stupidity. That's what cheaters are famous for. Was it worth ruining your lives being stupid? Ask Alex. You can't ask Mary because she's gone. But we know.

Mary leaves with nothing and has no contact with her kids???

Sorry to say that you might as well have said space aliens swooped in and whisked her away as that would have been just as believable.

Im all for the aggrieved party achieving victory but to insult readers with utter bullshit at the end to make the victory total does you no credit.

rated it as 3 for the writing skills, but on storyline alone it is a 2.

That ending was not very imaginative. 8 years for assault? ! Mary leaving without a word to anyone? ! Up until then the story was fine and entertaining.

Thanks and please keep writing.

not so bad but has some holes and it's a bit messy.

it was too early for a marriage proposal. But everything after LV was rushed. In some ways it felt like the same 5 minute clock was running on the end of the story as had been used on the cheaters, and we heard the door close with time to spare.

...for you to spend one more hour and do a proper ending?

Mary disappears...huh? She no longer loved her husband, she didn't hate him and she loved her kids. She also wanted Alex which really turned out to be a disaster but I don't think she would totally disappear...not after 20 plus years of stability in one area and you didn't indicate she was well traveled or knew people all over so...BS finish!

The fact that he and Helen got together...fine, quick but fine. My #3 score was because you are usually better than this and you wrote the story well...until the end so...3 only!

@ Anon If you had read the true stories of ex husbands on internet about cheating and EX WIVES WHO ABANDONED HER KIDS AND HUSBANDS, YOU WOULD NOT BE SO SURPRIZED! I read and I am not surprized.

In imagined story I recommened Vulcez "How Are You?" story.

would they start calling him dad just like that?

Strictly paint by numbers. The two loves have sex by the pool so some photographer can conveniently shoot tons of 8X10 color glossies? The two wronged parties instantly fall in love and live happily ever after?

This was horrible.

I can't believe the last few comments. This was a great tale. Cheaters were caught and were punished. One in prison and one long gone, hopefully suffering. One thing. This is fiction. It doesn't have to be realistic. Just to be a great read. You want reality? Watch the news.

I agree the ending could be better

First no-one said this is alex first crime

some police forces use assault as 1 crime and threatening to kill poeple as a second crime

As for mary yea could be hard to think a mom could go away forever but seen and hear of it happening a few times its the shame and guilt of it that forces them to stay away but they may have friends that keep them updated from time to time just because nick does not know does not mean mary is not in the know

Yea the legal stuff is messed up its a stroy so get real

Nice story

. . . it was OK. Nothing special really. The story-line was formulaic. But what really did it for me was that I found the writing childish, kind of all surface with little depth. But what do I know, really. Keep at it. Good writing is challenging.

but the fallouts have tremendous effect on the others, TK U MLJ LV NV

She is exposed on Facebook profile of dearbornmt@yahoo.com.

She was college instructor in Helena Montana until college administration was given details on Facebook profile. Also sent to college was photo of instructor cupping her bare 36C implanted breasts and a chronological, detailed, explicit account of how she coerced younger married male student into sexual relationship. Stories of some of couplings including multiple blowjobs at local baseball field in dugout and car. The dugout blowjob was witnessed by two men from yard adjacent to left field fence while she was sucking student's cock in first base dugout. He tried to stop her when one of the voyeurs yelled at them but she insisted on finishing him off. He warned her he was cumming, she told him she wanted him to in her mouth and she eagerly swallowed and livk her lips telling him how thick his cum was.

She also was kneeling down with blouse unbuttoned to blow him in her family room. Just after she had pushed him down on couch and she told him to relax and went andclosed the blinds. He spotted a car drive by and told her someone was in her drive. She told him to relax and not worry while he trie to convince her to at least lock door. Just before she went down to her knees between his legs the door began to open. She was just able to get to her feet before her youngest son walked in. The 18 year old had to notice her open blouse but said nothing. According to instructor a few months later she forgot to close computer and left lengthy cybersec IM SHE HAD INSISTED ON ENGAGING IN ON THE SCREEN. Her son called her a whore!!!

But that was name she insisted lover call her during her orgasms

Pretty good story.

First though, I know it is a common practice in stories here and maybe you all take cues from each other, but you CANNOT just kick your spouse out of her home even if she is a cheating cunt, much less demand that they only have FIVE minutes to do so.

It takes a court order to make a legal owner leave her home.

Also, who the fuck throws out whole uneaten pizzas? Only in America would someone even think to do so (write to do so) I guess. Where we are spoiled rotten. Salad wouldn't keep well, but the pizza would for several days.

Also, a mother does not just abandon her children even if they are grown. Not the way you the author portrayed her. Remorseful a little but still in her mind she fell in love with someone else. It affected him, and maybe she would be a little ashamed, but not enough to never speak to her children, (not to him, sure).

Okay, I don't agree with it, but I can at least understand Mary's "need" to fuck Alex.

But why shut off Nick?

Here in my state, a man caught his wife in bed with another man. After chasing the lover away, the husband sexually assaulted his wife. He got four months and three months of anger counseling.

Nick and Mary are still married and they told their kids that they are a fucking couple. They are no different than their spouses; they are cheaters too!

The measure of a good plot is how well it grasps the reader and keeps the reader in it's reality. In this case, the plot did well right up to the trip to Vegas. At that point, the two spurned spouses finding solace in each others embrace began to make the plot unlikely and stilted. The lack of emotional trauma and quick rebound relationship was dry. Catching the cheaters on the living room floor was unemotional and dry. All the way through to the end it was simplistic and silly. The only thing that I appreciated about it was that the cheaters suffered and the victims were not blamed for the cheating and did not suffer more than they had to from the cheating.

As far as the spurned becoming cheaters themselves? The answer is that you cannot cheat on a spouse that has already left a marriage. Cheating is an instant divorce in moral terms if not legal terms. You do not owe a cheater anything, let alone fidelity to a dead marriage.

I do not see Mary taking a small cash advance and disappearing. Without resources - she must be dead. A strange, unexplained plot device.

Maybe a bit of a stretch on the "believability" scale, but a good story, anyway.

It's a 4 Star rating in my book.

I hate a cheating wives story with little interplay between the wronged husband and cheating wife.

Anonymous whosr comment started "BULLSHIT" i'm sure God has reserved a seat for you to judge for him. You want to excuse behavior of original perpetrators and call foul on those who react? Held a fund raiser for any rapists lately?

Where was Yoda? Pretty good story until the ending. It's hard to read a fictional story, with made up characters, that's trying to portray something that might happen in real life when that story is just so wrong on so many points. . Or rather it's impossible to put reality completely out of a story like this. And the ending was so far from reality that it ruined the story. I don't see how Helen and Nick would be rolling around in the sack, given the emotional turmoil they would have been in, considering they were both watching 20 plus years of their married lives destroyed. So they cheat to get even or comfort each other? Unlikely. Worse than that? No way Nick's lawyer "protects" his business in that short a time period. Mary would have gotten half the business, half the sale of their home and half their other assets. No hiding bank statements and last years tax returns from a Judge. And there's absolutely no way Mary just leaves her kids and never speaks to them again. That was just stupid. She would have secured her half of the assets to ensure a comfortable retirement for herself and known that the kids would have been mad for awhile, but at the end of the day, she was still their Mother and they would have forgiven her. That leaves Alex. Not in jail. He would have gotten an attorney and promptly traded his jail time for Nick's jail time. You do realize it's illegal to send pictures like that to anyone? A Judge could sentence Nick to significant jail time. So Alex got half their assets and maybe moved away. Maybe not. Locking or trying to throw their spouses out of the marital homes was another fictional mistake. Since abuse, alcohol or drugs wasn't alleged, there's no restraining order possible, so Mary and Alex would have been in their houses. If Nick and Helen shack up together, there goes their adultery claims as they're doing the same thing Alex and Mary are doing. So this whole story turned into an improbable, unbelievable trainwreck. Not good.

Sad tale of woe. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

The anon who said fictional baloney got a number of his points wrong I'm not going through them all but the photographs they appear to be delivered by hand PI to lawyer to husband, suggest you reread the story and as for Mary everyone reacts to a situation different differently.

I gave the story five because I enjoyed it.

Lights came on in the Theater, all the Patrons left to go Home?..Sitting in the Back of the now well lit Theater, was a young Man with an up turn empty Jumbo popcorn container on his crotch!....The young Girls working there said to Him while looking at his crotch! Jimmy the Movie wasn't that Good!....No but your Mother was!!!!!!!!

Story is Brilliant! ★ ★ ★ ★ ★ WOOF!

Question to ask yourself:- Did the Girls seize the chance to Fuck the large cock wonder? OR Did They scorn the offending Boy and miss out on his wonder cock?

Question:- When Nick explained when He found out He said He was Playing Golf uhmm He was fishing! Oh Oh Maybe he was trying hit His driver into His Buddies Back Pocket FOUR OR IS IT FORE..... Or Maybe there a New Technique in catching fish using a Golf Club! See Ya!.... WOOF!

So...after they told all the kids the dirty details, they hadn’t touched the pizza so they trashed it and they all went out for Chinese food. How stupid is That!!? Don’t they know how good left-over pizza is for breakfast?! Jiminy Effing Cricket. This story is just so not believable.

The pizza thing don't make sense therefore everything else is subject....to questions.

bill

That was a good.story. Nick and Helen might have jumped the gun a little bit, but after their spouse's blatant cheating , it can be excused. Good consequences story.

I know they will never read this, but to reply to pennydog55 and Anon on 05/31/17, this is my take.

Nick said he got the info while playing golf...in My world you don't burn an asset or throw a friend under a bus. Telling the kids a friend told you about Mary when you were out fishing with a buddy would have narrowed who it was if one of the kids told Mary.

They threw the pizza out because no-one was hungry, especially for pizza (although throwing it out is a travesty). But everyone sitting in a restaurant (a neutral place) is much more comfortable.

Nick never sent any pictures to anyone, it's called bluffing. Nick saw the cops when he confronted Alex, who didn't see them. Helen told Nick before that Alex would go ballistic when he was served. Nick played Alex like a Stradivarius and Alex went all Neanderthal, just as Nick wanted, plus he threatened his wife just as Helen said he would in front of the police. At that point no-one had seen any photos except Nicks lawyer, so Nick had plausible deniability if Alex didn't take the bait that the photos even existed.

As for the lawyer making sure Nicks business was out of the reach of Mary in the divorce. I believe there was some type of agreement in place for many, many years and Nick just wanted his lawyer to double check to make sure everything was secure. That's not to say a good lawyer couldn't have gotten Mary a nice retirement chunk of it. Except Mary cut and ran before that could take place. She wanted away from Nick and be with, and maybe get remarried to, Alex. He said he didn't want anything like that and Mary realized she was nothing but a piece of Ass to Alex. There was nothing left for her to stick around for . Divorced from Nick, used by Alex and a great chance her kids didn't want anything to do with their "slut" Mother. How depressed she must have been....

If course this is just a FICTIONAL Story and I could be way wrong and none of my take is correct. Of course this was written in October 2010, so it's all a moot point. So don't worry be happy.

Liked story

Except

Love too quick

Develop OK timeline jumps

yes, I cheated, yes I kicked their asses but He never treated his kids bad. I would change all life insurance polices and they better hope they never need a kidney or bone marrow because they'ed die for sure. In most of these stories you hear the dad tell the kids not hate mom but to hate what she did. But for some reason no one gives a fuck about dad till you need him. The kids in this story would be shit out of luck if they needed anything.

those that are faithful and loyal can not imagine their mate would not be the same, TK U MLJ LV NV STILL REQUESTING TO RELEASE MY COMMENTS MLJ

Still like to know what happened to wife

Disappeared?

Job social security number etc unless professional hard to disappear

Friends who don't tell me about possibly cheating spouse are NO friends but enemies

Alex doesn't sound like good father but I agree most stories cheating wife supposed to be good mother Most times I disagree!!!

Solid story about cheating spouses who get burned. Children don't mean much to people like this. Where's Mary?

The good thing about your comment, is that if your kids ever needed a bone marrow transplant, they will be just fine if you refuse to help.

They can just go to their biological father.

If by some extraordinary circumstance, all your kids needed bone marrow transplants, then they can go see each sperm donor individually, as I am sure there is one for each kid.

Your wife deserves the Darwin award. You do know what that is, yes? It's an award given to those who improved the human condition by removing their genetic contribution before it could do any damage? Usually, it's awarded posthumously, as the recipient had the decency to bring about their own demise. In your case, it's ok, you can go on enjoying life, spending your time commenting how the poor, hapless cheaters are hard done by.

That's because your wife decided to end your genetic line for you. For that, she gets extra points.

And it's a good thing you can't make your boyfriends pregnant.

I'd sign this with my usual login, but I don't care to have you stalking my comments for the rest of your miserable life, no matter how short it may be

Nice story, if a little too much of a happy ending. These type of events rarely end well for anyone. Pain and sadness are common outcomes. Anyway, it was good to see the two decent souses connecting. Thanks for sharing.

Rushed, dialogue stilted and unrealistic, the romance between Nick and Helen was bizarre. It made no sense. It only existed for a happy ending.

Good story

Excellent story!