New Beginnings

EDITING, EDITING, EDITING

Good premise. Poorly edited.

Poor writing

The idea is fine but the wording is BAD, spelling is BAD, it appears the author never made it thru 4th grade

What Happened to Spell Checking?

The others said it, too. I haven't seen it very often where the writing goes from lucid to absolutely grammatically incorrect -- what a distraction; don't make your readers work so hard. It was a visual interruption; have a friend or lover edit for you.

Ugh!

What's with the 10 inch dick? Really now... who has one of those this side of porn stars? What i mean to tell you is to GET REAL with your story! A lot of us wish we had that kind of endowment but most of us don't. Neither should your character.

FUCKING STUPID COMMENTS

IT REALLY GETS TOO ME, YOU PEOPLE LEAVE YOUR STUPID COMMENTS, LIKE YOUR SOME KIND OF FUCKING BEST WRITER IN THE WORLD, IF YOU THINK YOUR SO FUCKING HOT, POST YOUR STORIES, AND LETS SEE WHAT WE GET. ANYWAY I LIKED IT.

I think it's a good story

I like the concept of lesbian and incest love, and how they can habitat together. What better way can a sister show her love to her brother, (especially a brother who had to endure a sexless marriage and is in need of sex ), than to fuck him, and fuck him well. Give her love to him and heal his battered ego. Thanks for the good story...Rich

Spellos

Please correct the spelling mistakes. Good story though.

Yep, you need an editor.

Good story, if a little fast paced. A good editor could not only catch the bad English and spelling, but make some suggestions on how to enhance the experience for the reader. I am a volunteer here and will be happy to help on the next one if there is a next one, If you want

I LIKED IT !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

YOU HAVE THAT TOUCH , PLEASE DON'T LOSE IT. YOUR STORIES ARE GREAT. THIS IS ONE OF YOUR BEST , SO FAR. I'AM GOING TO READ ALL OF THEM, I'AM ALREADY A FAN ...................LAROC OF AGES

way to rushed as usual

no guy is going to jump into bed with anyone right after getting a divorce. he would need time to get over it maybe months or a year so delete and rewrite it adding the proper time for him to heal and USE A DAMN EDITOR.

Wish your stories were longer. Maybe a series

Good story !

I liked your story a lot. I agree with some it could have been a little longer maybe he or she could have put it off a little longer fighting with their concience. Yes the spelling is off a little and probably could use a little help with the editing but don't let that stop you keep on thinking up all these sexy stories.