All Comments on 'Crash'

...it's a shame in some ways: you're good, we know it, you come up with the usual well-written, well executed, well finished product, and it's great, except...

... what i'd like you to do is sit back, take a deep breath and give us something outstanding again. you've it before and you owe it to yourself to push the envelope and do it again.

always nice. Thanks

Great to see another submission from you. Good story, but like the actual plot, sort of a solitary crash. I'd love to see you do more.

since I've been reading in chronological order, and there's several more years to go to catch up, I think the "break" was worth while. Your story set up and progress is as good as any you have written. This story is similar to another one, with the friend getting hurt and the guy getting laid, but it is different as well. Descriptions of the relationship are natural and erotic, and the story can be told in few words but words that paint wonderfully sexual images. The only thing that is not "natural" at least for me, is having my lover plead for me to "f-me." Yes, many have rubbed me, opened my clothes. and all but attacked me in their exploration and, yes, passion. But never did anyone cry "F-me." I really feel that I have missed something very erotic, but your stories allow me to relive some of those adventures and modify them somewhat in my mind by adding the command "F-me!" Thanks for providing that image.

OK. Well enough written. But, well, why bother? Maybe it's just that it goes from nothing but purely private attraction to the bedroom too fast, with no real development.

And if she's Mrs. McKeen, doesn't Mr. McKeen come into it somehow? Sure she might be widowed, divorced, or just abandoned, but why bring in her state of being married if you're not going to say something?

Not a bad story, but I won't be reading it again. And if it were the first thing of yours I'd met, I probably would have ignored the rest.

More.......?

Great story, you have a gift. Thank you for sharing it.