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Show, don't tell
25 % for the interesting idea. But the story didn't actually deliver what the title promised. We didn't see the girl turned into a breeder or a milk cow; that even could have happened in future chapters, but the story was wrapped with the last paragraph.
All we saw was some light bondage and a fucking. The story needed more elaboration and exhaustiveness.
liked it
The story was good, the details great and it drew the reader in. Now you have to add more to it make her his cow as your title says.
I give it a B+
Emma
It's meant to be a serial story
Hi readers. This is meant to be the first and therefore introductory piece for a serial story. This is why Valeria isn't transformed into a milkmaid yet, as its only the beginning, where she meets Hunter and their uncomfortable Master-Slave romance begins. However, I accept that I did not indicate that it was a serial story, but for anyone else critical of lack of detail or content, just be aware that it is only an introduction to the series. Thankyou.
Part 2 to come soon
Part 2 is coming soon, readers, and if you want to read my non-erotic work, go to http://tivanosasdemesne.blogspot.com
Love milk
Reading about the milks made me very horny.
Have a look at my sexy milk pics:
@XtremeMilkDrink
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