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What's next?
Interesting start, would be interested to read more, but you left too much unsaid for a first entry. Style was good.
More!
This is a great start but I cant wait to see what this leads up to. Please write more!
Background needed!
Enthralling. But there's too much left unsaid, so I just keep asking myself, "Why?"
Background needed!
Enthralling. But there's too much left unsaid, so I just keep asking myself, "Why?"
I want more!
Like NOW I like how this has started I LOVE that she is a fighter. And just how it flows PLEASE say you are writing more!
hooked
i agree that a lot of details are missing, but there is a lot of emotion and depth there despite the missing background, enough to leave so many readers begging for more. too many stories on here are just bones, structure and rigidity, but this has texture and draws you in...now i gotta read chapter two. Hopefully it's as good as this but with more history...
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