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Virtue
Actually it's the virtuosity that really gets me going with this poem / the belly laughs in the slaughter house / I'm not even going to begin to analyze the dynamics of what makes this such a delightful piece, Daphne.
Excellent
Change that "doesn't" (which goes with "things," right?) to a "don't" for s/v agreement. This is just wonderful, DA. Also a great choice for publication. :-)
I knew a Daphne
she'd never get this if I sent it to her.
Which is one reason I loved it so much.
Your work always makes me want to write, to try new things, which is why it's so important.
Thank you for sharing
I fucking love this
all in all there is good, and there is better, so if I say/ human sexuality is a belly laugh
in a slaughter house./ and /i stole your book from a girl (friend) /because three abed is too many
holes and parts and that scenario wears a
t-shirt that reads, "logistical nightmare." / are great, it shouldn't be construed that the rest of isn't good. Even the lines that I do not like (in themselves) fit well and they play well against other lines.
Dare I?
Yes I must leave a comment. I was with you all the way in this poem, and not all the Daphnes (Daphnes:) in the piece could put me off. Thanks for sharing this moment of madness. Congratulations on the 'Green E' - it is well deserved.
Why
does the thermometer not go to 212?
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Congrats on the little "greenie" for this really unique and creative piece. Daphne ought to love it!
Wow
Wow - really gripping. You had me the whole time.
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